A Treaty

October 5, 2010
By Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee


I hate myself
For missing you
For wanting you
For remembering you.

For remembering us,
And how perfect we were,
How happy we were.
How strong we were.

And yet we crumbled,
Under some unseen pressure
We're nothing more than dust,
Particles of love too small
To put back together.

I miss the way you looked at me,
Smiled at me
Held me
Kissed me.

I want to close
The vast and useless space
Looming between us.
To remind you of how it was
And how it should be.

You used to be clear
About what you felt for me.
And it was easy to let you know
That I felt the exact same way
If more intensely.

Now you look at me as if I'm a rock
And not even a useful one
You would consider sitting on.
A rock that you'd kick
Or throw at someone you don't like.

Though I'm sure you don't spend
That much time
Thinking about me in any way.
You don't return my texts.
Or tentative smiles.

So I'm giving up.
Surrendering.
Consider this a treaty

Not for peace
Because I'll never have peace of mind
Without knowing why you're gone.

Not for forgiveness
Because I don't forgive you
And I can't apologize for what I didn't do.

Not to consent to your opinions,
Because I don't understand why you treat me this way.
I don't understand how you feel.
So I can't agree.

So this treaty of sorts
Doesn't accomplish much.
It is only meant
To let you know
That I wish I knew what
I was trying to mend
And count you as an ally
Once again.


The author's comments:
I wrote this while listening to "I never told you" by Colbie Caillat. This poem is just.... I don't really care if it's well-written or not - this is just something I had to write in hopes of moving on.

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alex198 said...
on Jun. 26 2011 at 9:44 am
alex198, |, Other
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I really like this :) It was so sad and really heartfelt. I also loved the repitition you used at the end of several of the lines. I thought it worked really well. I loved it! :D

on Jun. 26 2011 at 8:57 am
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Thanks so much! I love getting feedback on my poems new or old :P Sure, I'll look you up! Thanks again.

Mariam.J GOLD said...
on Jun. 26 2011 at 3:44 am
Mariam.J GOLD, Dubai, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I don't have many favourite quotes , though I do love the truth that 'change is constant .'
For you , a thousand times over - Hassan , The Kite Runner
If you want to leave footprints in the sands of time , don't drag your feet - Rudyard Kipling

I know this poem is probably old, but I saw you mention it one of your posts so, thought I'd give it a shot  ( :

I love the 'discontinued flow' of the poem and I <3 <3 the last stanza .

Very sharp tone, yet subtle ( :

Mind looking up my work ? Born Again - Mariam.J

 


on Oct. 25 2010 at 7:05 pm
genesis27000 SILVER, Mexia, Texas
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YAY! 

Hurry up and get your telefono already!


on Oct. 21 2010 at 3:33 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Awh thank you so much Geni :) I love ya forever and you're my bestest friend in the galaxy :)))

on Oct. 20 2010 at 11:16 pm
genesis27000 SILVER, Mexia, Texas
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Darrrrnnn! What can I say? This has left me speechless.. Not a big surprise there. You are amazing with words. Thanks for being my bestieee♥ Miss you like MAD! :))

on Oct. 18 2010 at 12:00 pm
ellyncannon PLATINUM, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
That which we persist in doing becomes easier, not that the task itself has become easier, but that our ability to perform it has improved.
Ralph Waldo Emerson
<3

Grrr! can you write anything NOT amazing? I love this one!!!! Maybe the best????? It's great!!!!! :> 

FANTASTIC!!!!


on Oct. 16 2010 at 8:23 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Thanks Alana. Lol, yeah she laughed pretty hard. Agreed - but some girls experience this feeling more than others. :/ Thank ya! What can I say, I LOVE words :P

on Oct. 16 2010 at 7:50 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.
-Alex (aka GangstaEyes)
Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.
-Winston Smith '1984'
Don't go wishin' your life away...
-Daddy S2
"What a drag it was to be limited by reality."

This is really good and I think it's well written. I read on the thread thing where you posted this too that Ellen I think laughed at the rock stanza! I liked it lol it was really good and that's how a LOT of girls feel at least once iin there life! Great flow and i don't think i've told you this but you have really good vocabulary! lol :D


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