Abandon me in bedlam and paint me a face

September 26, 2010
By Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran


I let out a ‘yawp,’ voice thick with drunken hallucinations and eyes glazed with ruby insanity. I dance the feral flamenco of ringing lunacy that takes place at the end of every world, every world that is sunk in cold defeat and licorice evil, that is. When did I become a restless beast, to rearrange the corpses of the kings and noblemen that ruled the world in the time before the lord of the heavens stopped caring? ‘O well,’ says the blind horseman, ‘look into the mirror and see your hideous form being bombarded by the black and white static weight of truth’s unreality. Maybe there is a dribble of something to love that is running down the gash that is your gruesome mouth.’ I turn away in a fit of rhythmic convulsions, and images of chaos in its pure-fire form ripple through my already unsettled disposition burning my core to its reddened marrow. Upsetting screams flit across my mind, and I scream frantically in the direction of their voices as dying knights spear the newborn clouds and dark blood drips slowly from the cotton forms. I’m battling with a wild sea snake now that has always lived beneath my bedroom window sill in the hedge, biding his time until the time until the time when I would meet my match in the form of dark matter. Fire dances on his serpentine lips and scorches what is left of good what is left what is left what is left of innocence. What is left of innocence?

Who will release me from the wild thing that is my throttled self? Who will break the bonds of immortal existence and miserable being that cut into my blackened shoulders and bestow death with a kiss upon my knotted forehead. I dream of an end. I dream of an end I dream of an end I dream of an end I dream of an

end.


The author's comments:
Is this gibberish, my bewildered friends? Yes and no.

Fear disorder.

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leafy said...
on Dec. 22 2011 at 10:12 am
leafy, City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

Nonsensical, realistic, flowing, paroxysmal...this is a piece of many descriptions. Inktea's metaphor describes this perfectly.

on Aug. 10 2011 at 1:07 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
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Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

:D Sometimes when trying out a new perspective I come up with the craziest thing I could possible think of.  It's quite fun to be insane.

on Aug. 10 2011 at 9:31 am
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Well, I suppose that worked out quite nicely then, not that there's anything wrong with insanity.

on Aug. 9 2011 at 10:39 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

I read the poem through different eyes.  Instead of assuming he's crazy I thought him sane.  And therefore it made sense.  I'm not sure if that explained right but I tried.

on Aug. 9 2011 at 5:41 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

You did see sense in it? Wow, I didn't expect that at all. But I'm glad, if it was good sense. :)

on Aug. 9 2011 at 4:01 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

I actually loved this one.  Maybe you weren't planning for it to be sensical but I thought it made plenty of sense. :D

on Jul. 23 2011 at 11:14 am
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

The bewildering effect was what I aimed for. It's nonsensical, but that's what I like about it, actually. It's really impossible to follow, because there is very little to follow!

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jul. 22 2011 at 8:46 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

Again, I love the language but hard for me to follow. I really like the first couple of sentences but the rest just bewilderes me!

Inktea BRONZE said...
on Jul. 3 2011 at 6:44 pm
Inktea BRONZE, Almonte, Other
2 articles 17 photos 15 comments

Cats. I'm pretty sure cats seal the deal at least for me. But Inkteacats doesn't work so well.

Anyway, necessities, that's why I chose the name.


on Jul. 3 2011 at 5:32 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Many thanks, Inktea. Your clever metaphor makes me proud...

Your username, I have observed, combines two things which are necessary to my happiness. Ink and tea. What else is a basic necessity for the writer?


Inktea BRONZE said...
on Jul. 3 2011 at 3:51 pm
Inktea BRONZE, Almonte, Other
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This reminds me of my own free writing a fair bit, although I must say, this is immesnly better. It seems to follow a train of thought as it detaches from the tracks.

on Dec. 1 2010 at 12:33 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

Gee captain, at the end you sound like you really want to leave. one could not strees it better than. do your dance.

CarlyMurphy said...
on Nov. 23 2010 at 3:51 pm

Of course! 

And merci beaucoup! :)

PS- My cat??


on Nov. 22 2010 at 7:09 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

What a lovely compliment, Carly Murphy!

I can honestly say that this piece came very easily to me, as if I didn't even write it. Thank you for reading it through to the end. Good luck in all your future endeavors. I hope your cat is doing well...


CarlyMurphy said...
on Nov. 22 2010 at 6:02 pm

You, my dear friend, shall never cease to amaze me.

This is pure brilliance: the beauty of the words strung together, the chill of imagery, the precise phrases ("corpses of the kings," "feral flamenco," "licorice evil," "I dream of an end"), the endless emotion. You have an abundance of talent.


on Oct. 30 2010 at 9:28 am
A_shy_dove GOLD, Hubli, Other
10 articles 1 photo 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never compare your life with others, as you have no idea what their journey is all about.

Thank you.

on Oct. 29 2010 at 6:48 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Your words make it beautiful.

on Oct. 28 2010 at 7:24 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

I'm very flattered, Shy Dove.

I love it when my imagination is described as such. Have a good day. :)


on Oct. 28 2010 at 7:22 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

I love your points of view! Indeed, a plain example of insanity was one of my purposes in writing this article. I'm surprised (and pleased) that you found it beautiful, for I found it rather hideous. Thank you for your words, my dear Stargirl.

on Oct. 27 2010 at 8:29 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

This, <head cocked to one side> seems to explore and explain insanity, at least, in my mind.

It makes it seem beautiful.

(Which, I suppose it is. Or can be.) <Shrugs>



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