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She ruled the land

August 22, 2010
By Anonymous

She ruled the land
She ruled the Pawns and Bishops
The Knights, Rooks, and the King
She took pride in what she had accomplished.
But not what she had done.
She has learned her lesson now
Now that she had seen the outcome
But the people want to teach it to her again
Don’t mess with the balance of things?
Because if the scales tip?
You will fall

She fell
And didn’t get back up
She fell for the last time
Don’t let it suck you in
Don’t let yourself think that it’s ok
Because


Its not.



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on Aug. 29 2010 at 10:09 am
Ame_Ginchi BRONZE, River Falls, Wisconsin
3 articles 3 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep." -From 'Stopping in the Woods on a Snowy Evening' by Robert Frost

Thank you!!! ^^ Really what inspired me was defiantly a chess board. I had an image of a chess board in my mind when I was writing this and when I was writing it I really didn't know where I was going on this. Thanks for all the great comments ^^ The last line was the best ending I could think of and I almost kept writing onto it because I thought that I couldn't end it! So I came up with this ending so it wouldn't be supper long. :P

on Aug. 27 2010 at 6:40 pm
The_Squirrel GOLD, Port Alberni, Other
15 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I will because I can, I can because I want to, I want to becasue you said I couldn't.

you know what? i luv it. the whole time i was picturing a chess board then the last phrase totally tied it together. I like the meaning and i think it was greatly written.

on Aug. 27 2010 at 12:45 pm
book-keeper26 BRONZE, Oak Ridge, New Jersey
3 articles 8 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
People come in and out of our lives for a reason, the trick, is knowing when to let them go.. and when to hold onto them even tighter.

nice idea, but i don't think you totally executed it properly.

on Aug. 26 2010 at 9:45 am
DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD, Martinsville, New Jersey
14 articles 1 photo 278 comments

Favorite Quote:
Worry is simply a misuse of the imagination.

i dont think i quite got the concept, but i love the abrupt ending. could you take a look at some of my poems? thanks.  :)

on Aug. 26 2010 at 8:21 am
Phantom_Girl GOLD, Ft. Carson, Colorado
14 articles 0 photos 279 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If it comes out of the lion's mouth...it will be on the test."
-Mr. Bala

I love how most of the poem was a wonderful, complex metaphor, but it ended with a simple "Its not." It was a great poem all around, very well written.

on Aug. 25 2010 at 7:53 pm
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
67 articles 0 photos 336 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

i like the abrupt ending! it was unexpected and it really hit me in a powerful way! you have a very nice flow and i enjoyed reading this very much!

check out some of my work, too if you'd like. great job on this. keep writing!!(:


on Aug. 25 2010 at 1:37 pm
timevampire GOLD, Bellville, Ohio
14 articles 0 photos 163 comments

Favorite Quote:
Quoting yourself makes you an ass.

I really like your work...

on Aug. 25 2010 at 11:14 am
meganwagner21 PLATINUM, Old Bridge, New Jersey
42 articles 0 photos 139 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes good things have to fall apart so better things can fall together." -Marilyn Monroe
"Nobody can go back and make a new beginning, but anyone can start today and make a new ending." -Maria Robinson

can totally relate. interesting concept

on Aug. 25 2010 at 10:33 am
thebushhippie PLATINUM, Sandown, New Hampshire
24 articles 0 photos 49 comments

Favorite Quote:
Leave behind your own footprints! :0)

what inspired you to write this? loved that last section, especially when you said "Because it's not." great job!

on Aug. 24 2010 at 3:32 pm
annkaykay2011 DIAMOND, Lansing, Michigan
75 articles 11 photos 137 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am who I am, sorry, no changes."

This is a powerful work. Good job!

on Aug. 24 2010 at 2:53 pm
chrisbriones GOLD, Anaheim, California
11 articles 0 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I believe nothing can be justly and completely explained by words."

Will you share with me what inspired you to make this? Who perhaps?

I like the power of the last line. It's direct and powerful.