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Broken Pieces

May 22, 2010
By Anonymous

She holds a small chest in her hand covered in a thick, black casing.

She holds it close to her heart and sits patiently, waiting.

She was waiting for someone to open it, to release the truth that she hides from the world.

She wants someone to tell her things she never knew.
Then, he arrives to comfort her.
He whispers in her ears, letting her know its okay.
It's okay to be herself and to show the world her flaws that she is afraid to let go.
She offered it to him with slight hesitation.

He takes advantage of her innocence.

He lifts his heavy boot and crushes her underneath.

Snatching the small chest away, he wraps his fingers around it.

Slowly he crumbles it to pieces.
She watches, helpless and confused.
He wasn't supposed to be so vicious.
Instead, he was supposed to be her remedy, her relief.
She believed that he was the person she could confide in and tell all of her secrets to,



But he wasn't.
The one who would grasp the chest and shelter it from the fire,



But he didn't.
Guilt overtook her mind.
Guilt claimed her for his own.
She was left with the broken bits, trying to put them back together.
She picked up piece, after piece one at a time with tears falling in her hands.
With tear stained cheeks she was a welder,

Trying to recreate the sacred chest that had been destroyed.


The author's comments:
what inspired me to write this piece was all of the females that have been taken advantage of. I hope that people feel stronger and more impowered after reading this.

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on Aug. 16 2010 at 8:08 pm
JakeShaw PLATINUM, Atlanta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
When you're in a night that seems almost devoid of stars and you look but can't find someone to help you see. Look for that lonely star and let it guide you until you find the light. (anonymous)

You show that this is more than emotion its an image within life. A picture on a wall that tells a story. Its a person who hurts or has been hurt and it's incredibly well written! Check out some of my work i think you will like it! Keep Writing!!!!

on Aug. 16 2010 at 11:31 am
TheShadowsHaveEyes SILVER, Lansing, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
How much dirt I gotta throw in the ocean to make a new island

  This was great, an excellent way of explaining such a painful, heartbreaking thing, as blankly as possible, I really liked how you left the two characters faceless, allowing us to not imagine who, but instead what, and it made the emotion aspect a lot stronger in my opinion because of that.

  I really liked everything about this, emotionally powerful, and very relatable.

 Excellent job. :)


on Aug. 15 2010 at 11:00 pm
Spiritless BRONZE, Corry, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
" I'm selfish, impatient, a little insecure but if you can't handle me at my worst then you sure as hell don't deserve me at my best" ---Marilyn Monroe

This is very wonderful, I can feel the emotion in it, because I have gone through it and it is never right for a man to do anything to hurt a girl in such ways but it happens and we must learn to forget about it once and for all because they're  many out there that will do it again, if you don't take caution first. So all in all, good job!

on Aug. 15 2010 at 8:38 pm
alaskatrailmutt, Jefferson, Maryland
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I love how you wrote this wow. Great. I can relate. It does make you feel guilty to show yourself.

on Aug. 15 2010 at 5:45 pm
Caitiecupcake GOLD, West Deptford, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"You are not a beautiful and unique snow flake..."

this is a really unique poem, very interesting and i love it

on Aug. 14 2010 at 2:59 pm
kiwi12 PLATINUM, Austin, Texas
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this is really pretty. it feels delicate. nice job!

on Aug. 14 2010 at 2:09 pm
LoverOfSong PLATINUM, New Lenox, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"When words fail, music speaks." Hans Christian Anderson

i agree and its enchore! ... i think.... :)

on Jul. 3 2010 at 7:41 am
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
\"either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin

\"If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\"

\"If music be the food of love, play on.\"

Wow, this is so powerful!!! and amazing!!! onchoir (sorry about the spelling) onchoir! i must read more!!! this is so oooooo uniuqe and well writeen!! i love it!! please check out and comment on some of my work when you get the chance (i think you would like my poem 'words unspoken')