Broken Pieces

May 22, 2010
By , charleston, SC
She holds a small chest in her hand covered in a thick, black casing.

She holds it close to her heart and sits patiently, waiting.

She was waiting for someone to open it, to release the truth that she hides from the world.

She wants someone to tell her things she never knew.
Then, he arrives to comfort her.
He whispers in her ears, letting her know its okay.
It's okay to be herself and to show the world her flaws that she is afraid to let go.
She offered it to him with slight hesitation.

He takes advantage of her innocence.

He lifts his heavy boot and crushes her underneath.

Snatching the small chest away, he wraps his fingers around it.

Slowly he crumbles it to pieces.
She watches, helpless and confused.
He wasn't supposed to be so vicious.
Instead, he was supposed to be her remedy, her relief.
She believed that he was the person she could confide in and tell all of her secrets to,



But he wasn't.
The one who would grasp the chest and shelter it from the fire,



But he didn't.
Guilt overtook her mind.
Guilt claimed her for his own.
She was left with the broken bits, trying to put them back together.
She picked up piece, after piece one at a time with tears falling in her hands.
With tear stained cheeks she was a welder,

Trying to recreate the sacred chest that had been destroyed.





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JakeShaw said...
Aug. 16, 2010 at 8:08 pm
You show that this is more than emotion its an image within life. A picture on a wall that tells a story. Its a person who hurts or has been hurt and it's incredibly well written! Check out some of my work i think you will like it! Keep Writing!!!!
 
SwimChick said...
Aug. 16, 2010 at 11:31 am

  This was great, an excellent way of explaining such a painful, heartbreaking thing, as blankly as possible, I really liked how you left the two characters faceless, allowing us to not imagine who, but instead what, and it made the emotion aspect a lot stronger in my opinion because of that.

  I really liked everything about this, emotionally powerful, and very relatable.

 Excellent job. :)

 
MemoriesFading said...
Aug. 15, 2010 at 11:00 pm
This is very wonderful, I can feel the emotion in it, because I have gone through it and it is never right for a man to do anything to hurt a girl in such ways but it happens and we must learn to forget about it once and for all because they're  many out there that will do it again, if you don't take caution first. So all in all, good job!
 
talking-with-silence said...
Aug. 15, 2010 at 8:38 pm
I love how you wrote this wow. Great. I can relate. It does make you feel guilty to show yourself.
 
Caitiecupcake said...
Aug. 15, 2010 at 5:45 pm
this is a really unique poem, very interesting and i love it
 
kiwi12 said...
Aug. 14, 2010 at 2:59 pm
this is really pretty. it feels delicate. nice job!
 
Egyptiangirl13 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 3, 2010 at 7:41 am
Wow, this is so powerful!!! and amazing!!! onchoir (sorry about the spelling) onchoir! i must read more!!! this is so oooooo uniuqe and well writeen!! i love it!! please check out and comment on some of my work when you get the chance (i think you would like my poem 'words unspoken')
 
LoverOfSong replied...
Aug. 14, 2010 at 2:09 pm
i agree and its enchore! ... i think.... :)
 
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