June 15, 2010
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i can't fall anymore
i once did and i still do
over and over
as time looks at me
falling to the ground
afraid of love to vanish
holding on because afraid of being alone,as a selfish girl
you may label me
afraid of everything in my present
past and the future
in a long distance relationship
killing myself to stay stable
pulling myself togather
for him,jacob
i can't but tear once or twice or more,
it's the only escape of this
of my fears of lonesome n love
locked in my mind
missing all those moments
when i knew what i want
and what i need
i'm no longer sure
of what i want and what i need
all i know is that fear
is holding me back
from jacob and everyone
a selfish child
wanting to understand the world
not possible, because one human
can't solve their own problems
why can a person, understand the world
a misconception of me and the world

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PrincessPineapple said...
Jun. 21, 2010 at 5:46 am
i like this! it's deep, but at the same time you can relate to it, which makes for really great writing! check out some of my stuff too?
asiangurl replied...
Jun. 21, 2010 at 10:44 am
awwww thanks:) i will read yourz...n see wat ya got:)
xXsmileXx This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 18, 2010 at 9:03 pm
This poem really caught my eye. I know what you're going through and really you're such an amazing writer. truly i was drawn in deeper with every line. Awesome job!! I can't say it any way else
asiangurl replied...
Jun. 19, 2010 at 1:01 pm
thanks...it means alot to me as a poet writer.
ShytoyaB said...
Jun. 18, 2010 at 8:05 pm
this is a really great poem..i can soo relate to it
asiangurl replied...
Jun. 19, 2010 at 1:01 pm
thank you, i wanna say i appriciate ur comment
ShenelleCrystalx3 said...
Jun. 17, 2010 at 8:25 pm
That was soooo good ! Don't stop writing your so good :) Come check out my poems , thank youu :)
asiangurl replied...
Jun. 17, 2010 at 8:53 pm

thank you:)

i will check out yours, that i promise

ShadesOfPale said...
Jun. 17, 2010 at 1:52 pm
I'm glad :) I've been in your situation before, so I related to it very well...I know things seem very tough at times, but you WILL come out of it ok, you always do :)
asiangurl replied...
Jun. 17, 2010 at 8:54 pm
thank you, for the support n reading my writing misconception
ShadesOfPale said...
Jun. 17, 2010 at 9:11 am
Not the best grammar in the world, but poetry isn't really about grammar unless your in school or something. As for the context, I really liked the wording and the story within...I felt your pain; I felt your hope; I felt your clinging on to what you have; I felt your fear... It's very hard to get someone to feel that in a poem, and you did very well at it...Grteat job! I do not think I will forget you anytime soon.
asiangurl replied...
Jun. 17, 2010 at 9:44 am
thanks, i truly wrote this poem down to reveal my current feelings i didn't care fore my grammer...random thoughts. i had to write down but it means alot to me what you said:)
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