made-up-story-poem MAG

May 13, 2010
By KelleySchorn SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
KelleySchorn SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whatever you are be a good one-some president i dont remember which
procrastinaters unite!...tomorrow!!-matt
i'm F-U-L-LLLLL i think i can spellllll-allie =]


i'm sitting here
on this train and i
start seein' all the passengers wavin' goodbye
i turn away and start thinkin' about
the you i'm leavin
and i feel free

i used to think
that we were meant to be
but summer changed you
so drastically
you used to keep me safe and
hold me close
tell me you loved me
that you'd never leave
but all these things you did
they made me see
you never cared
a single thing for me


The author's comments:
just a story-poem i made up while i was bored in religion class

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lani123 said...
on May. 29 2013 at 9:39 am
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on Nov. 10 2010 at 9:56 pm
KelleySchorn SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whatever you are be a good one-some president i dont remember which
procrastinaters unite!...tomorrow!!-matt
i'm F-U-L-LLLLL i think i can spellllll-allie =]

hahaha thats funny cus in my mind it actually is a song XD

on Oct. 16 2010 at 9:21 pm
Aerolin PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
34 articles 19 photos 133 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Fear is only in the mind"

omg it would be cool as a song :)

on Sep. 27 2010 at 8:58 pm
maybeshannon DIAMOND, Keller, Texas
53 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"you just can't recreate stupid." --jacobbbb
"i just saw the picture of epicness... M&M guitar!!" --kevin brown
"our love is so dumbbb" --sean kingston
"if perfect's what you're searchin' for then just stay the same" --bruno mars <333 =]

yeahh it sent me an emaill that said this got publishhed!! =]] ahhh tis wonderfull!!! =]]

on Sep. 27 2010 at 7:16 pm
KelleySchorn SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whatever you are be a good one-some president i dont remember which
procrastinaters unite!...tomorrow!!-matt
i'm F-U-L-LLLLL i think i can spellllll-allie =]

oh my gosh i am being published! btw its kinda sadly ironic cuz it has a crappy name ;P

on Sep. 27 2010 at 7:10 pm
KelleySchorn SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whatever you are be a good one-some president i dont remember which
procrastinaters unite!...tomorrow!!-matt
i'm F-U-L-LLLLL i think i can spellllll-allie =]

omg i got published??? no way!!

on Sep. 27 2010 at 4:14 pm
maybeshannon DIAMOND, Keller, Texas
53 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"you just can't recreate stupid." --jacobbbb
"i just saw the picture of epicness... M&M guitar!!" --kevin brown
"our love is so dumbbb" --sean kingston
"if perfect's what you're searchin' for then just stay the same" --bruno mars <333 =]

sorry bout th typo on your name, kell doll lol meant to put "alwayskelley" =]P  awesome job m'dear =]

on Sep. 27 2010 at 4:13 pm
maybeshannon DIAMOND, Keller, Texas
53 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"you just can't recreate stupid." --jacobbbb
"i just saw the picture of epicness... M&M guitar!!" --kevin brown
"our love is so dumbbb" --sean kingston
"if perfect's what you're searchin' for then just stay the same" --bruno mars <333 =]

AHHH KELLYYY!!!!  YOU GOT PUBLISHHED!!!! =]]] take that all you alwayskelly haters =]

on Aug. 18 2010 at 10:14 pm
KelleySchorn SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whatever you are be a good one-some president i dont remember which
procrastinaters unite!...tomorrow!!-matt
i'm F-U-L-LLLLL i think i can spellllll-allie =]

awwe thanks linz!

on Aug. 18 2010 at 4:03 pm
possiblylindsey GOLD, Keller, Texas
12 articles 12 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
"see? if i liked chris drew, id end up like randy. 5 foot 1 and vegetarian. vegetarians arent men." -camden
"what are you grinnin' at?" - mr. martinez
"you just cant recreate stupid." - jacob

ayy. dont hate on her title. sure, it could use some work, but give it love: the poems greatt.[= awesome job kell!

on Jul. 25 2010 at 2:52 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

The flow isn't really present in this one. I mean, in certain parts your rhyming was there, but in others it was just forced. I like the idea, just work on the arrangement of your words.

And, I'm not really big on critiquing someone's title, because I am awful at coming up with them, but "made-up-story-poem"???? No reflection on your writing whatsoever, but really??? haha, just my opinion.


on Jul. 24 2010 at 11:24 am
KelleySchorn SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whatever you are be a good one-some president i dont remember which
procrastinaters unite!...tomorrow!!-matt
i'm F-U-L-LLLLL i think i can spellllll-allie =]

thanks i wrote during school in my mind its actually a song

 


on Jul. 23 2010 at 5:07 pm
crubs33 DIAMOND, Lido Beach, New York
58 articles 3 photos 750 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The most courageous act is still to think for yourself. Aloud."- Coco Chanel
Life isn't about surviving the storm, it's about learning to dance in the rain.

I like it!! i love how it flows and is just really natural!!

on Jul. 20 2010 at 1:58 pm
writer62 SILVER, Springfield, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
" in order to be the best you have to play the best, in order to play the best you must practice the best, in order to practice the best you must practice the most. Practice is the key to being the best!"

i liked it. Good job


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