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our eyes met
i will never forget
how i felt
as you made me melt
with your love a burning desire
something i will always admire
a love song,a happy ending
something that was always pending
you watched the sunset above the sea
well, to bad it wasent with me
we tryed so hard to be there
but u never paid your share
so now its done and over with
just a dent in our memory
a dent that will never repair
because right now theres nothing more i wannt
then to be the girl over there
the one whom you paid your share
a burning desire
a meet of the eyes
something that caught me and then tryed
you let me go and i fell
i just hope this girl knows well
cause your eyes are like a spell




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JoPepperThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 25, 2011 at 10:58 am:
omg that was soooooo good!!!! I can feel the emotions so well!!!!!! :D
 
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WickedStarcatcherThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 14, 2011 at 11:18 am:
Omygosh i love this! it's really pretty and expressive and makes me smile :D I love the first few lines-"you made me melt" it's cliche but sooo cute and fits in perfectly with ur theme :) <3
 
renni replied...
Jun. 15, 2011 at 9:02 am :
awh! thank you so much =D i think ur comment made my day xD
 
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optimisticpessimist said...
Jul. 26, 2010 at 6:23 pm:
I like the last line "your eyes are like a spell". Good job, keep writing. I'd appreciate if you would check out my work ;)
 
renni replied...
Jun. 14, 2011 at 8:40 am :
i know this reply is like super late! and im sorry i didnt reply back sooner, but that you so much =D
 
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