Im loving you!

May 9, 2010
Laughters, smiles, hugs, kisses; no longer help free my pain!

I feel lonely all the time, no matter who's around I always feel the same!

Its nobody's fault, I think myself is the one I am to blame..

Im in pain, constantly, I'm saying it its not a shame

feel me, help me, understand me, do it all over again

Be mine, make me yours, Play with me under the drops of rain

Tell me you love me, and mean it, Me, is what you will gain!

Dance with me all night long, hold my hand, and with me get so crazy, lets get insane!

Can I say you mean so much too me, thats why I talk to you, you're the road thats leading my train,

Help me understand who am I? tell me now, Explain!

If this whole world leaves me, Promise me, on my side you'll remain!

.. And I'm telling you this, its not lame!?!

Say it back, and on each other we will maintain

When I truley love you; your desire will run down my vein

I need you, walk me through all this, let your hand be my cane!

I love you, can I say it, Or will you complain??

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BurnHem said...
Nov. 22, 2010 at 4:17 pm
You definitely have caught my total attention with the lines of your so "effective" poem. I seriously couldn't stop reading it over again. I absolutely love your writing, and I am to read more right after I hit "post comment". Your words flow just as they need to! Beyond wonderful!!  Great meaning!And  Great work!!!
Shahed replied...
Nov. 23, 2010 at 4:44 pm
Well Im glad you really like my work :) it means a lot to me,, Thank you!
BurnHem replied...
Nov. 26, 2010 at 11:35 am
Yes, I do ! very good! and you're welcome!
MRose911 said...
Nov. 15, 2010 at 12:39 am
I love the beginning! Amazing poem! Please check out my work if you get the chance!
Shahed replied...
Nov. 15, 2010 at 5:37 pm

Thank you!! :D

Of course Ill as soon as i get a chance to :)

Jess749 said...
Sept. 5, 2010 at 9:46 pm
I love this poem! the rhyming really enhanced the poem!
Shahed replied...
Sept. 5, 2010 at 11:17 pm
Thank you!  It's really deep! :)
CrystalDE said...
Aug. 9, 2010 at 4:46 pm
Really creative, i like how you used your rhyming. Interesting!
Shahed replied...
Aug. 9, 2010 at 9:02 pm
Thanks! I like this one a lot :) :D
Egyptiangirl13 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 5, 2010 at 7:09 pm
wow this is great:) awesome job i really like this!! your a great writer. (you had commented on my work one or two weeks ago and told me when to tell you when my new work was in) so three of my new poems are posted! i hope that you'll check out all of them:) 'true love is when...', "who i used to be', and 'you wouldn't expect' are my new posts! btw i saw that you are writing a book, another thing we have in common!!
Shahed replied...
Aug. 5, 2010 at 9:04 pm

Thank you!!  that's so sweet!

Ill check them out right away :) Aww, thats awesome, maybe we can publish them at the sametime who knows :)

sam013 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 10, 2010 at 4:35 pm
great work! i love the emotion that is entwined with the beautiful language. check out my work and let me know what you think!
Shahed replied...
Jul. 10, 2010 at 9:34 pm
Thank you! And it will be my pleasure to check your work :)
lostnhim said...
Jun. 10, 2010 at 8:22 pm
Absolutely Beautiful!! I love it, well done!!! (:
Shahed replied...
Jun. 10, 2010 at 8:52 pm
Thank you so much for stopping by :)
lostnhim replied...
Jun. 11, 2010 at 12:15 pm
Your very welcome! I love your work and am always excited to read a poem of yours that I havent already! Your a great writer! (:
Shahed replied...
Jun. 11, 2010 at 12:46 pm
Thank you that is so sweet and supportive, I like your work too.. Thanks again! :)
lostnhim replied...
Jun. 11, 2010 at 1:41 pm
No promblem! (:
jeph15 said...
Jun. 3, 2010 at 12:59 am
beautiful i thought it was great!!
Shahed replied...
Jun. 3, 2010 at 11:14 am
Your words always add value to my work, thanks Jay!
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