True and Fake

March 8, 2010
By BloodyMary PLATINUM, N/A, Other
BloodyMary PLATINUM, N/A, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Life is like a box of chocolates; You never know what you are gonna get.


I know true people who lie
And good people who die
I know liars go to hell
But Heaven is where they dwell.

what I mean is, bad people change
Even if you think you're stupid and strange
And what I mean is:
There are persons who are fake
And fake reputations are what they make
You think they're good and kind
But hellish accusations are what they find.

So learn how to distinguish who is true
So that less people can be fooled.

The author's comments:
I need some constructive criticisms about my poem.

I wrote this when I was in school, while I was doing nothing.

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on May. 30 2010 at 3:34 am
BloodyMary PLATINUM, N/A, Other
22 articles 8 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is like a box of chocolates; You never know what you are gonna get.

Hello, thank you for the feedback. I'll read your poems and comment also somehow...thanks again:)

 

Have a nice day!


J.C.Evans GOLD said...
on May. 29 2010 at 3:56 pm
J.C.Evans GOLD, Westland, Michigan
14 articles 50 photos 53 comments
I really do enjoy the unique side of the poem it def has a fresh flow and the rhyme is great...the only thing I can find that maybe u could change are maybe lines 8 and 9 like Many people are wrongly fake... False reputation are what they make but besides that it is AMAZING! n maybe u could check out my poems sometime;)




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