Mommy

March 24, 2010
By thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."


When you first saw me,
What did you think?
Did your eyes roll back?
Did you breathe a sigh of relief?
Or did you just stare?
I wonder what you thought,
that first day in the hospital.
Did you notice my first blink?
My first intake of air?
Did you gush over my new smile?
I want to be held in your arms
That day when we first met.
If I could remember, I would.
Oh, would I.
If I could make you remember, I would.
Were you anxious?
Apprehensive?
Is that why you looked away?
Is that why you chose not to love me?
I wonder what you were thinking,
as you handed me off to the nurse.
Did you regret it?
Did you know it was the last time you'd ever see me?
I never knew it was possible
to miss someone you've never met.
To love someone with all your heart,
and truly know it's not mutual.
So why did you give me up, Mom?
Why have you sentenced me to a lifetime of wondering?
Because that's what I am.
Abandoned in the dark.
Sent to a different world, one where I am alone.
One where I stare at my shoes, wondering.
One where I have lost the right,
to call you Mommy.



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on Oct. 3 2010 at 2:00 pm
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

thank you!

on Jun. 27 2010 at 11:23 am
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
67 articles 0 photos 336 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

no, it didn't actually happen. but i wrote it in recognition for all the mother-less children in the world. i could feel their pain just by writing this piece.

on Jun. 12 2010 at 4:40 pm
Imaginedangerous PLATINUM, Riverton, Utah
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I loved it. You are good at creating the right mood.

wiinga BRONZE said...
on Jun. 11 2010 at 12:55 am
wiinga BRONZE, Kwigillingok, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
Never give up, no matter what you go through.-Anonymous

this almost brought tears to my eyes! did this really happen??

poohbear777 said...
on Apr. 19 2010 at 9:26 am
Giving up a child is a hard thing to do.  The author shows depth of understanding from the child's perspective, and I'd like to see the author's understanding of the mother's perspective, as well.  Great poem!

jill456 said...
on Apr. 12 2010 at 10:47 pm
this is one of your sadder poems. did this really happen? and if not, maybe someone else has left you and you're comparing that experience to this person's one with their mother. very well written...this is one of my favorites

PrezLover101 said...
on Apr. 11 2010 at 9:20 pm
was this a true experience? you're mom couldnt have given you up? what's this aboutt???

Venus_Queen said...
on Apr. 11 2010 at 9:13 pm
i can feel your feelings in this! this is really good too! :}


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