The Food Critic MAG

March 19, 2010
By Jaquie BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
Jaquie BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
3 articles 0 photos 407 comments

Favorite Quote:
This is certainly one of my favorites: "I will become even more undignified than this, and I will be humiliated in my own eyes." -2 Samuel 6:22


I can feel it
In the back of my mouth
Like a mystery flavor
Hard to define
Sweet and syrupy
Too sweet
Too syrupy
Like molasses
Dripp

i

n

g

Down my throat
Like sickly medicinal
Red liquid
Grandmother once
Forced down the tunnel
Like a plane crash landing
In your mouth

“Don't open wide!
It's a trick!”

I know this taste.
I know this flavor.

It's the aftertaste … of a lie

Sitting thickly (so sweet, so sickly)

Like a wad of guilt

Ready to expose me

Because:
The last thing said was
The lie that I told was
What I didn't really mean was

I love you.


The author's comments:
I had to take cough syrup this morning and I suppose I could call that horrid experience inspiration. I hope you enjoy reading this piece as much as I did writing it. God bless!

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on Apr. 15 2012 at 7:40 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

Cool poem~ I like the title, "The Food Critic." It works!

Inksy SILVER said...
on Dec. 4 2011 at 12:54 pm
Inksy SILVER, NSL, Utah
7 articles 0 photos 89 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Three can keep a secret if two of them are dead"
~Benjamin Frankiln
"Love? Above all things I believe in love. Love is like oxygen. Love is a many splendored thing. Love lifts us up where we belong. All you need is love."
~Moulin Rouge

This is great (: I love the way you wrote this - fantastic. Keep it up!

on Sep. 22 2011 at 9:40 pm
Anonymous_7 SILVER, Branson, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
-The only time you can get away with murder is when writing a book!

Would you mind commenting/rating my work? Thanks!

on Sep. 22 2011 at 9:39 pm
Anonymous_7 SILVER, Branson, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
-The only time you can get away with murder is when writing a book!

Amazing! I love how you wrote this! Especially the Dripping part! Nice job.

Nonononono said...
on Jul. 28 2011 at 10:08 am
Nonononono, No, Utah
0 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
No.

Nice work! Very well written. God bless you!

on Nov. 30 2010 at 12:15 pm
CupCake023 BRONZE, Georgetown, Pennsylvania
4 articles 8 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
Take a chance, you never know how perfect something can turn out.

I like this poem very well done =)




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