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March 10, 2010
By thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."


What do you see when you close your eyes?
Do you see unimaginable figures, specks of colors, or visions from memories?
Or do you just see darkness?
What do you see when you open you eyes?
Do you see loved-ones, nature, or animals?
Or do you just see darkness?
What is the difference?
When are your eyes closed, and when are they really open?
Maybe when the world is how you imagine it, you are happier.
Maybe when you can control the darkness, life seems admirable.
Maybe you see better when your eyes are closed.


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ilove2write said...
on May. 24 2010 at 5:30 pm
wonderfully written. a true masterpiece

urfromheaven said...
on May. 24 2010 at 5:29 pm
beautiful....

saraferrara said...
on May. 24 2010 at 5:28 pm
love it! one of my favorites. i love the last line!

on May. 24 2010 at 5:28 pm
so thought provoking and wonderfully written!

on Apr. 14 2010 at 11:03 am
hisbabyjuggalette GOLD, Howell, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
when life gives you lemons throw them at stupid people

Oh love this itsit's wonderful very artistic my friends all love it now all they say is the last line over and oveR again

jill456 said...
on Apr. 12 2010 at 10:26 pm
this one was so powerful that i actually closed my eyes to see what would happen. you described it perfectly! the last line was the best...you have a way of ending a poem perfectly.

on Apr. 3 2010 at 1:51 pm
NeverCaredForKool-Aid GOLD, Elkridge, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
I don't believe in hell but I believe in my parent's couch-- Watsky

Ah, I like this.  The last line was most certianly the best, but the overall poem was pretty good too.

The one this that I might suggest are smoother transitions between your sub-subjects of open eyes and  closed eyes.


PrezLover101 said...
on Mar. 30 2010 at 6:50 pm
I see my dreams :)

Jan-o Wizard said...
on Mar. 28 2010 at 7:28 pm

Awesome conversation piece. Wouldn't it be interesting to discuss this in a class of both blind and sighted students?

It might knock down some walls between the two....





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