My Own Hate Poem

February 27, 2010
By FreakyEyed DIAMOND, Juneau, Alaska
FreakyEyed DIAMOND, Juneau, Alaska
53 articles 29 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
"This, too, will pass."


I hate you. Truly, I do.

The slow opening of my morning eyes hates you.
My double-helix curls hate you.
If I were a mountain, my minerals would hate you.

Everything about me hates everything about you.

My smile hates you.
My knuckles hate you.
The sound I make after I yawn hates you.

And when I see you, I hate you all the more.

The lint on my pillow: hate.
My often dry cuticles: hate.
When I say that I love you,
after I look at your crooked smile:
HATE.

Each dead skin cell that I shed
hates all you are and could be.

My after shower prune-fingers hate you.
My tongue, sliding over my lips, HATES you.
And my mind, so alive with photographs,
Oh!
…How it hates you.

If I could set your existence on fire, I would.
And I would hate
each
and every
single
ash
individually---
like the grains of sand that stick to the bottom of my fingernails
after I build a sandcastle.

Because I hate you.

I hate your laughter, and I hate your voice, and I hate the words you say.
I also hate sleeping in your shirt. And constantly smelling your scarf.
And being painted without my written permission.

The blood in my veins flows simply because of the burning rage you incite within me.
And just as a cooling metal, I swear,
it begins to solidify in your absence.


The author's comments:
(Inspired by “Hate Poem” by Julie Sheehan.)

It's a love poem.
For Laib.
<3

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on Apr. 3 2012 at 3:13 pm
windswift DIAMOND, Arvada, Colorado
80 articles 0 photos 91 comments

Favorite Quote:
let it burn, suffering teaches the soul; let it grow, love nourishes the heart.

strong emotion, better left contained to paper and pen.  flows well, incites emotion well, once more easily able to relate to, and true, no doubt.  take more time to let things flow, and dont flow as much as you have here, to much flow will mean that you had no time to think about what was being written, and in order to have a poem at its best, it must not flow so smoothly, it must invoke a sense of slow passing time, while the reader can hardly tell the differance.  focus on invoking much stronger emotions as well, in far smoother ways.  the emotion should come across in a violent, ripping way, that disrupts the flow, but you must bring it back around to the subject while maintaining the power of the emotion.  hope you keep my advice in mind, and remember, it takes practice, so dont give up, be persistance.

on Apr. 11 2010 at 6:07 pm
FreakyEyed DIAMOND, Juneau, Alaska
53 articles 29 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
"This, too, will pass."

Haha, thanks again! ^_^'

I feel all tingly and special now. <3


on Apr. 11 2010 at 6:06 pm
FreakyEyed DIAMOND, Juneau, Alaska
53 articles 29 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
"This, too, will pass."

Thank you! =D You ought'a read the inspiration... it's even better. ;]

on Apr. 11 2010 at 5:21 pm
the.kanguru GOLD, Irvine, California
16 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Why is Jesus holding a machine gun?"
"Maybe it's part of his therapy."

ha. pretty much perfect. it made me grin (not...sadisticaly. i just thought it was cool.) your poems are really something else.

jabp891 BRONZE said...
on Mar. 8 2010 at 12:26 pm
jabp891 BRONZE, Hoonah, Alaska
2 articles 2 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is short, so laugh often.

How cool! Great job!

on Mar. 8 2010 at 10:09 am
FreakyEyed DIAMOND, Juneau, Alaska
53 articles 29 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
"This, too, will pass."

Haha, thanks! You should read the original--- the one that inspired this... it's even better. =]

on Mar. 8 2010 at 9:02 am
guitarist27 GOLD, Christiana, Pennsylvania
11 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
If we don't open our eyes now and see all of his lies, our eyes will never open again.

this is really deep...i like it..


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