Time Slows Down For Me

February 17, 2010
By PenWizard1 BRONZE, Sunnyside, Washington
PenWizard1 BRONZE, Sunnyside, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"Always strive for perfection."


My paradise is simple, yet unique.
To be walking in the early signs of spring,
With the cool wind all around.
And for that one instant you shiver, and suddenly feel alone.
Only then does the sun warm your bones and show you the beauty of a crisp February afternoon.
Then I see, time favors me.


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The author's comments:
Early Eliot and Frost Poems.

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on Feb. 23 2010 at 5:20 pm
Nikiblue PLATINUM, Bloomfield Hills, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Stupid Is As Stupid Does." -Forest Gump (;
"No one who achieves success does so without the help of others. The wise and confident acknowledge this help with gratitude."

I think this is pretty. I would have made the "Only then does the sun warm your bones and show you the beauty of crisp February afternoon" sentence a little shorter. Like breaking it up between "the sun warm your bones" and "and show you the beauty" and "of a crisp February afternoon" all in separate stanzas, you know? Just a suggestion though. Good work (:


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