He loves me, He loves me not.

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Pluck number one,
He loves me.
The flower petal dropped to the ground soundlessly,
Laid there on top of the luscious, green grass;
It was unmoving as a peaceful lake undisturbed.

Pluck number two,
He loves me not.
The white pedal fluttered down spinning gracefully,
Landing just beside the first.
How nice.

Pluck number three,
He loves me.
Flashing dazzling, white teeth,
The girl smiled.
Was her luck turning out for the better?

Pluck number four,
He loves me not.
The man she loved was strong and handsome.
His eyes, a light green, could mesmerize her endlessly.
If only he loved her the way she did him.

Pluck number five,
He loves me.
She was just an average, everyday girl,
Who someday hoped to be married with kids.
His kids.

Pluck number 6,
He loves me not.
His name was Michael. Michael Anderson.
He was a quiet young man, not the popular type that most girls loved;
But what wasn’t there to love?

Pluck number 7,
He loves me.
“Sohpie? Where have you been? I’ve been looking for you.”
Sophie turned around to see Michael there, staring at her breathlessly.
“You were looking for me?” she replied, dumbfounded.

Sophie looked down at her decapitated flower;
No more petals to pluck.
She returned her gaze to look him in the eye.
“I love you, Sophie, will you marry me?”
Tears flooded her eyes as she breathed an enchanted “yes.”





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Zaylie said...
Apr. 4, 2011 at 8:42 pm

This one if I could I'd rate it higher...not kidding. It's a perfect dream come true kind of think. I love it.

-Zaylie

 
hatelove said...
Apr. 27, 2010 at 10:21 pm
 so cute!!! i like this... will you look at my work i think you will like it
 
thewriteidea This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 11, 2010 at 7:39 pm
This poem has a real nice sense of originality in it. You took something so simple as the cliche saying of "he loves me not" and made it unique. I also love the ending. Check out some of my work if you'd like! 
 
beautifuleyess12 said...
Mar. 20, 2010 at 5:10 pm
This is beautiful <3
I really like this one(:
 
D3N~Po0ki3SaUR:3 said...
Mar. 16, 2010 at 12:30 pm
what a wonderful peice. it was very good and one of the best that i've read.
 
lovespromise<3 said...
Mar. 14, 2010 at 8:19 pm
This is totally awesome!
 
BrokenHeartedImagine said...
Mar. 14, 2010 at 1:09 pm
i really liked this alot ! Very real with the back and forths that love does bring forth to us
 
vampluv11 said...
Mar. 2, 2010 at 10:40 am
i agree with something little-miss-sunshine said, to try turning it into a short story. it was excellent, and i loved it!, but the flow does need a little more work. id love to see hw it would turn out in a short story!
 
little-miss-sunshine said...
Feb. 26, 2010 at 3:49 pm
This is a very good poem, although I found it didn't flow to well. You could almost make this into a short story! Very cute.
 
little-miss-sunshine replied...
Feb. 26, 2010 at 4:02 pm
I thought I might mention when I say turn it into a short story I don't mean just put it together differently I mean expand on this little love story with the focus still being pulling the petals off the flower. I also wasn't saying you should do that but that the poem provides a good enough story line for that. Sorry if that confused you, and if it didn't well than I guess this comment was kinda pointless.
 
MetalChickRock said...
Feb. 24, 2010 at 10:07 pm
hmmm...very interesting, now lets just think if she landed with a "he loves me not" then what would happen?
think of both ways and think of which one was better...nice poem i guess
 
SmileyFace94 said...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 8:22 pm
this is beautiful.
 
perceptive_soul said...
Feb. 15, 2010 at 7:04 am
OH MY GOSH! I LOVE IT!!! i cant believe it! if only things would turn out like that...dont know how many flowers i killed.
 
alchive This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 15, 2010 at 11:22 am
yes, a wonderful sentiment and concept. good style!
 
Born_to_fly replied...
Feb. 20, 2010 at 12:03 pm
very beautiful well done.
 
relientkgirlie replied...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 6:35 pm
this is too cute!! :))
 
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