Diamonds last forever...but your a rhinestone

January 19, 2010
The shadow overcasts,
My midnight sky;
The shadow of one man’s,
Heartfelt cry.
He screams, and he screams
Hoping someone will hear
He screams and he screams
“Come help me! Anyone near?”
You lie to yourself.
Walk away;
Pretend to be gone.
The truth never exists,
In the devil’s spawn.

Yet he screams and he screams,
So you never forget.
And he screams and he screams;
So you feel the regret.
He continues to scream.
So he hear him in your sleep.
And he screams and he screams
His chills
They only reap.
And he screams and he screams,
Then silence comes about.
No longer does he scream does he scream,
Because words no longer come out.

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Emmy H. said...
Feb. 11, 2010 at 8:06 pm
I liked the theme and the basic idea of the whole poem, but I don't quite understand the, the "your" should be "you're". Hope it helps!
AjBlAcK said...
Feb. 11, 2010 at 12:18 am
Amazingly unsettling.
have_a_heart This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 10, 2010 at 6:40 pm
that was simply amazing. i just cant even think of anything that you could possibly change to improve it. its perfect.
The~crayon~in~my~heart said...
Feb. 3, 2010 at 9:58 pm
whoa.....i know that i was supposed to critique.....but wow that is so freakin amazing that the fantasticalness fill it up so much that htere is no room for critqueing
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