Staring Into Me

October 24, 2009
By LeilaniLives PLATINUM, Fort Wayne, Indiana
LeilaniLives PLATINUM, Fort Wayne, Indiana
42 articles 11 photos 128 comments

Favorite Quote:
"They say 'Life's two steps forward and one step back' - But what if I tripped and fell down the whole flight of stairs?"


Staring into me
Current mood:Misunderstood
I see you staring into me.
I wish my eyes were window free.
Glaring in, seeing past my face
behind these eyes, a whole new place.
Instead I'm stuck here eyes wide open,
with every tear, one less token.
I can't stand you staring into me.
I feel so nude and revealing.
You vacuum up my shatter pieces,
dissect, diagnose, digest my reasons.
Missing parts of me you finger.
Sharp to touch the memories linger.
I turn my head to change your gaze.
You'd be distraught inside my maze.
My eyes blue are water clear,
and the lungs that hold my heart sheer.
Why look in and try to feel,
just listen in and hear what's real.
When my eyes smile, it's love inside.
The love of hope I must confide.
I'd wear glasses to block your view,
because I'm ill of been seen through.
Instead our eyes will not connect,
my head down and not erect.
I suffocate as you stare into me.
You desecrate to my anxiety.

The author's comments:
I have anxiety and depression. I wrote this piece to let out the frustration and anxiety inside me on a daily basis, also with the hope someone else feels the same way.

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on Apr. 3 2010 at 11:29 pm
LeilaniLives PLATINUM, Fort Wayne, Indiana
42 articles 11 photos 128 comments

Favorite Quote:
"They say 'Life's two steps forward and one step back' - But what if I tripped and fell down the whole flight of stairs?"

my*and anxiety* I'm sorry, I'm in a rush.

on Apr. 3 2010 at 11:28 pm
LeilaniLives PLATINUM, Fort Wayne, Indiana
42 articles 11 photos 128 comments

Favorite Quote:
"They say 'Life's two steps forward and one step back' - But what if I tripped and fell down the whole flight of stairs?"

To better improve myself for the future, may I ask why you felt by rhyming limited  the expressing of my axiety?

Sincerely, Leilani

on Apr. 1 2010 at 7:51 pm
elfiewrites BRONZE, Hillsdale, New Jersey
3 articles 0 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The seat of knowledge is in the head, of wisdom, in the heart."~William Hazlitt
"Be yourself, everyone else is taken."

This is deep, but excellent! Keep on writing!! If you get the chance, may you please comment on my work too? Thanks so much.

on Mar. 19 2010 at 1:55 pm
kookymnstr PLATINUM, Crowder, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
" One good thing about music, When it hits you, You feel no pain."- Bob Marley

I relate to this poem alot. I get this feeling often, just sayin

on Feb. 1 2010 at 7:19 am
Lover_that_Hates DIAMOND, Reynolds, Georgia
76 articles 0 photos 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
"She was fascinated with words. To her words were things of beauty, each like a magical powder or potion that could be combinded with other words to create powerful spells." From: Lighting(By: Dean Koontz)

I love this poem! its deep but simple if that makes sense. very very good! Love your use of language. Maybe you woul;d like my work "Sometimes Life sucks" check it out if you like.

on Jan. 10 2010 at 12:17 pm
wombatz-rule GOLD, Montrose, Minnesota
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I live with anxiety disorder and mild depression, too. It's such a struggle to live a daily life without expressing it somehow. Your words were really touching, although the rhyming somehow limited what you could express for me. However, an excellent job. It takes a lot of courage to admit and express feelings. Keep writing!

Aurora said...
on Jan. 7 2010 at 6:51 am
great as well as your other poems! :)

on Dec. 9 2009 at 3:49 pm
LeilaniLives PLATINUM, Fort Wayne, Indiana
42 articles 11 photos 128 comments

Favorite Quote:
"They say 'Life's two steps forward and one step back' - But what if I tripped and fell down the whole flight of stairs?"

Oh? Well, thank you so very much. :) Comments like yours are immensely encouraging. :D

on Dec. 9 2009 at 2:28 pm
calephchad BRONZE, Guin, Alabama
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Thank you for posting a comment on my work. I love this beyond words can describe. I'm not even going to attempt to describe how I feel and amazing this poem is. Wow. This is definitely a 5 out of 5. Great work. !

on Dec. 3 2009 at 7:37 pm
LoveLikeWoe DIAMOND, LeSueur, MN, Minnesota
54 articles 2 photos 748 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whoever laughs first has the sickest mind.

i LOVE this! it's AMAZING! :D

lilybb BRONZE said...
on Nov. 27 2009 at 12:04 am
lilybb BRONZE, Nyack, New York
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interesting :)

on Nov. 9 2009 at 2:58 pm
LeilaniLives PLATINUM, Fort Wayne, Indiana
42 articles 11 photos 128 comments

Favorite Quote:
"They say 'Life's two steps forward and one step back' - But what if I tripped and fell down the whole flight of stairs?"

Thank you very much! That was a very kind comment. :)

on Nov. 8 2009 at 5:11 pm
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
26 articles 0 photos 493 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

This is a really good piece, you conveyed the emotions really well. Love your rhymes and use of language!




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