Cannot See

October 8, 2009
Heartbreaking pain
may try to reign
my life,
my mind,
my soul.
"My kingdom numb
my will is done
now let me rest in peace"
rest wont come
and all my pain
to you are hidden.
You do not see me.
What color are my tearstains?
My pain
is all invisible.
Nothing to see.

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xBaByGiRrL22x said...
Mar. 23, 2010 at 2:55 pm
this is reallly good. so deep
plz keep writing!!
FlyleafFreak said...
Mar. 10, 2010 at 6:40 pm
Wow, this si really good. It reminded me of my own past too, where for three years I was perpetually numb and my pain hidden. Excellent job, never stop writing
Saidah M. said...
Mar. 3, 2010 at 2:47 pm
I really liked your poem..!!
It really made me think of my past. All the pain and hurt I felt.
Thanxx for the poem that reminded me of me.
Hopee to enjoy some more of your writing pieaces.
*****Saidah M.
.xCutMyLifeIntoPiecesx. said...
Feb. 21, 2010 at 1:17 pm
I really love how in this poem you can literally turn pain into beauty! A lot of people on teenink ask me to read their work and, quite frankly, I'm not always impressed, but I think you really have something going here your work is something to be wondered upon. It is the deepest emotion with the most beautiful outlining deatil of beauty I am in absolute awe!
roseann This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 6:47 am
this really touched me. seems like ppl look at u but never really see you. i know you probably hear this a lot but you got talent. not afriad to share whats inside with the rest of us. i like that. keep it up.
Underestimated said...
Feb. 4, 2010 at 2:14 pm
i like this one alot, its awesome, once again i can relate.
im the type of person who hides their feelings, so they r invisible. yer a great poet(:
muzyk~luver said...
Feb. 3, 2010 at 8:14 pm
i really enjoyed this piece
CaptainFabulous. said...
Feb. 3, 2010 at 6:51 pm
your poems could lift a building!
really enjoyed this
keep writing
invisable_nikki said...
Feb. 3, 2010 at 6:50 pm
wow this poem is great, it has a very strong vibe to it. i like your writing style not only was i reading it the words come right off the page as if they were alive.
Candypop said...
Feb. 3, 2010 at 5:42 pm
This is a really good and strong poem! :D
ChaoticDamned said...
Jan. 29, 2010 at 5:01 pm
wow...this is really good...I like it *two thumbs up*
ilovemath=) said...
Jan. 26, 2010 at 1:13 pm
~very good~ I loved it!
dc123 said...
Jan. 22, 2010 at 11:26 am
i know where your come from on this one because i was always let down by ever one ans where i grow up i was not aloud to show my failings
Spcl_One said...
Jan. 21, 2010 at 7:00 pm
This Is great really Just Great I hope to see it in one of there mags i think it really should be in there ((:
hBaAnNnAaNhA said...
Jan. 21, 2010 at 4:20 pm
i like all of your poems, but this is probably my favorite:)
Starts.With.Mad.Ends.With.Die said...
Jan. 19, 2010 at 9:08 pm
I Really Do Enjoy your work, Its Deep But not far Enough Under that it wont touch even the simplest of hearts
ryanthebrat said...
Jan. 19, 2010 at 8:25 pm
i like your poems. i really like them. :D
Carol said...
Jan. 19, 2010 at 6:30 pm
This is great, I loved it. >.< tre bien
ShernayB. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 14, 2010 at 6:43 pm
Your work is always powerful and beautiful.
mockingbirdsong said...
Jan. 11, 2010 at 4:15 pm
You sound very hurt and alone, but your not alone, trust me. I wrote this song once called :"There's somebody out there" It talks about how,no matter what you've done, God is a forgiving and loving God and has room for everyone in his arms, You just have to run to him. He will listen to your feelings and He knows the colors of your teardrops, He loves you and when no one else shows up, God is there for you, just run. This poem is touching.All my poems aren't posted yet, ... (more »)
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