Butterfly Thoughts

September 13, 2009
Butterfly thoughts
Like fairytale songs
Flutter about
Over dreams, right and wrong
Ever so light
Ever so free
They whisper through minds
Too evasive to see
Butterfly thoughts
Like silver bell laughter
Light, tinkling mystery
Leaving glitter-dark after
Colorful kites
Too quick to grasp tight
Fragile and shining
Drifting shapes on sunlight
Butterfly thoughts
Like crystal-tint rain
Dripping like diamonds
On our minds’ window panes
Beautiful, silent
Lovely and true
The only connection
Between me and you





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Inkspired said...
Nov. 21, 2009 at 11:24 am
the poem's like the 'butterfly thoughts' you're describing! I love your descriptions. Beautiful!
 
TigerLynn said...
Oct. 15, 2009 at 4:09 pm
This is very interesting and pretty! I like it. It's almost...dainty! lol. Keep writng.
 
Veritytrue replied...
Oct. 15, 2009 at 5:08 pm
Thank you!
 
Bethie2011 said...
Oct. 7, 2009 at 9:19 pm
This is a really good poem! I really liked it.
 
Veritytrue replied...
Oct. 8, 2009 at 7:29 pm
Thank you!
 
TheseEyesThatSeeTheWorld This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 26, 2009 at 9:59 pm
Wow. Very deep. Beautiful choice of words.
 
Veritytrue replied...
Sept. 26, 2009 at 10:41 pm
Thanks so much!
 
Veritytrue said...
Sept. 25, 2009 at 5:00 pm
Thank you so much! This is my first published poem, so thanks for sharing your thoughts! Another of my poems just got posted, so feel free to comment on it too if you have time! Thanks again!
 
Veritytrue said...
Sept. 25, 2009 at 12:05 am
Hi everyone! Thanks for reading my poem, and please feel free to leave any comments or critcism! I'd really like to get your opinion on how I can improve or what you liked so that I can become a better writer! Thanks so much for your time!
 
xomolls This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Sept. 25, 2009 at 2:55 pm
I am so glad that you commented on my work because this poem is gorgeous. My favorite lines are "Like crystal-tint rain" and "On our minds' window panes." Keep writing.
 
Veritytrue replied...
Sept. 25, 2009 at 5:02 pm
Sorry, my reply is actually posted up top.
 
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