I am a Sculptor MAG

June 30, 2009
By kiwipuppyluv GOLD, Rochester Hills, Michigan
kiwipuppyluv GOLD, Rochester Hills, Michigan
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I am a sculptor
with quick and helpful hands

shaping my poetry (slowly)
to what I want it to
look like

sculpting my mind
onto paper
pushing around my dreams
until they fit in order,
the perfect shape.



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on Jun. 8 2011 at 1:13 pm
cassxxx8 BRONZE, Northport, New York
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great reflection

on Feb. 12 2010 at 4:19 pm
kiwipuppyluv GOLD, Rochester Hills, Michigan
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Thank you everyone for the comments and suggestions, everything is helpful! :)

on Aug. 22 2009 at 9:08 am
wind'schime SILVER, Malacca, Other
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i like it.it describes everyone on teen ink pretty well.

Schubster said...
on Aug. 9 2009 at 1:16 am
great poem :) i think the title fits everyone on Teenink. again, great job and keep writing.

on Aug. 9 2009 at 12:02 am
Eilina Sealtman SILVER, London, Other
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I think when you wrote "shaping my poetry (slowly)

to what I want it to

look like"



Having the "look like" on another line is incredibly tacky. It stops the reader in their tracks and makes them spew. But putting it in the line above gives it a great sense of dictation and dicipline.



Otherwise, its fantastic, and I really reccomend you keep going.

on Jul. 15 2009 at 1:39 am
MorningStar15 DIAMOND, Orange, Vermont
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briliant? ITS WICKED! i <3d it tons.

<3

kayla

on Jul. 12 2009 at 11:01 pm
bigdefenceman13 BRONZE, Augusta, Maine
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god this is briliant!!

on Jul. 11 2009 at 7:43 pm
montreal132 SILVER, Rush, New York
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The diction fits well with what youre talking about, however the words you used to say them with were not the best, in my opinion. Maybe an extended metaphor would be better here.


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