Shotgun Slumber This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

April 22, 2009
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My face is smushed against the glass –
cheekbone and jawline numb from
the cold, and long hours spent pressed
against the window. Rhythmic breaths
create patches of fog along the contours of my nose and lips.

Out of the corner of my right eye
I catch glimpses of the landscape we
pass by, but I’ve seen it all before.
Concrete barriers and painted lines
keep my driver on course.

Beyond the asphalt and wildflower medians
sprawl cornfields, suburban neighborhoods,
vast parks. Perpetual movement fools me
and for a moment, I am stationary –
free to view the passing still frames
of others’ lives.

Another mile marker and tired eyes flutter –
the endless strings of telephone lines,
cow pastures and landfills blur together
as the lullaby resonating from the spinning
axles beneath my feet sings me to sleep again.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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something said...
Dec. 16, 2009 at 3:44 pm
cyanidecaleph said...
Oct. 29, 2009 at 7:24 pm
I love this peice of work. Nice job! I love the name and everything. I really admire your work. Excellent job. :)
TheseEyesThatSeeTheWorld This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 19, 2009 at 9:25 pm
I finally got the title after rereading it a few times. Nice job.
~blackrose~ said...
Jun. 29, 2009 at 8:24 pm
nice work i felt like i was the one in the car because you were so descriptive. nice work.
BebopCowboy said...
Jun. 27, 2009 at 1:46 am
i felt like i was with you on a long seemingly unending road trip. very nice :)
Megan W. said...
Jun. 22, 2009 at 10:33 pm
This is kind of the same style as I would write, although you go for the "complex" side of things where I go for "simplicity". 4 stars :)
lover26 said...
Jun. 22, 2009 at 5:10 pm
that was relly good but y that title?
Schmandrea replied...
Oct. 11, 2009 at 12:38 am
I think it's the title because she was half asleep and was between seeing nothing then flashes of scenes.
firefly116 replied...
Nov. 24, 2009 at 6:07 am
when someone rides in the passenger seat of a car right beside the driver it's called riding "shotgun". as she was sleeping in that front seat, she gives an account of what she notices. at least that's what i thought she meant.
MeaganF replied...
Dec. 17, 2009 at 11:25 am
I totally agree with firefly116. flashes?? makes no sense. passenger's seat? precisely.
annkaykay2011 said...
Jun. 22, 2009 at 5:01 pm
Beautiful imagery and stanzas
cmoney1996 said...
Jun. 21, 2009 at 6:05 pm
Perfect couldn't get any better
Sclong said...
Jun. 15, 2009 at 3:51 pm really made me have nothing to say more...well just one word awesome!
Passion03 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 11, 2009 at 2:43 am
nice very nice finally understood the title haha great imagery you've got quite a talent keep it up
PeaceLoveDance321 replied...
Nov. 14, 2009 at 5:38 pm
whats the title mean?
redfishcatefish replied...
Jan. 26, 2010 at 5:30 pm
she's sleeping in the passenger seat of the car. :)
Kiersten.p.o said...
Jun. 9, 2009 at 1:18 am
hye awesome poem. besides wat everybody is saying, i think the title fits. your poem at is well written and i like the words that were used. it was a bit compex, but i liked it!!
if you could, could you comment on my poems when you have a chance?
Arianna P. said...
Jun. 8, 2009 at 1:59 am
very good
karilla D. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 6, 2009 at 3:37 pm
that last stanza was very strong
powerful finish
Meghan said...
Jun. 4, 2009 at 10:21 pm
Amazing poem!
I wish I had your talent!
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