Shotgun Slumber This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

April 22, 2009
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My face is smushed against the glass –
cheekbone and jawline numb from
the cold, and long hours spent pressed
against the window. Rhythmic breaths
create patches of fog along the contours of my nose and lips.

Out of the corner of my right eye
I catch glimpses of the landscape we
pass by, but I’ve seen it all before.
Concrete barriers and painted lines
keep my driver on course.

Beyond the asphalt and wildflower medians
sprawl cornfields, suburban neighborhoods,
vast parks. Perpetual movement fools me
and for a moment, I am stationary –
free to view the passing still frames
of others’ lives.

Another mile marker and tired eyes flutter –
the endless strings of telephone lines,
cow pastures and landfills blur together
as the lullaby resonating from the spinning
axles beneath my feet sings me to sleep again.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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fun size said...
Apr. 27, 2010 at 10:02 am
That was a great poem! I also like the picture attatched to it! (mostly for the backround) But way to detail it! Every time I go on a trip i'll think of this!
starlight26:) said...
Apr. 5, 2010 at 6:44 pm
Detailed wondefully! Describes a road-trip beautifully. Like SolvoAnimus said, im going to remember this poem every time I go on a trip. :) PLease check out some of my work! thanks
SolvoAnimus said...
Mar. 19, 2010 at 3:09 am
Im going to subconsciously remember this poem for when I go on a road trip...
I Just love moments like these....
bmmmszw said...
Mar. 2, 2010 at 10:30 am
great poem
bmmspm said...
Mar. 2, 2010 at 9:43 am
its ok erfgu'2f[oi4u5gb[o
soontobe12 replied...
Apr. 27, 2010 at 10:05 am
thats mean because this is a great poem and im sure god does not like you saying that you know what they say if you don't have anything nice to say dont say anything at all and if you dont like it than just dont post anything.
KhD:) replied...
Nov. 11, 2010 at 8:28 pm
To soontobe12, do not speak in place of God. Also, bmmspm was stating an opinion, not being mean. If they really wanted to be mean, they would have completely bashed it with a few choice words. They did not. The term "ok" is neither a negative nor positive comment; it's neutral.
bmmsjj said...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 10:36 am
Good poem i liked it.
xLpoet said...
Feb. 20, 2010 at 1:39 pm
This poem has great flow.
sumthingprecious said...
Jan. 29, 2010 at 8:29 pm
Hi my name is destiny, I’m a writer just like you. We write about real things and let our words explain how we feel. But my step-dad is getting deported and I’m holding a petition. So if you could please help a family out. And let me now lose a father by some stupid laws I would be thankful. I need all the help I can get. You can make a difference in a stranger’s life. http ://www.thepetitionsite .com /1/Help-keep-a-loving-man-from-getting-deported
fun size replied...
Apr. 27, 2010 at 10:05 am
Aww I am so sorry about your Dad! Just to help with it you shoul keep writing!
Yvonne32 said...
Jan. 29, 2010 at 4:20 pm
I love this! The way it flows throughout the entire composition is truly incredible!
sumthingprecious replied...
Apr. 27, 2010 at 4:38 pm
Thanks I hope everything goes well too.
skstorc said...
Jan. 29, 2010 at 12:43 pm
this is really good =) i can completely understand the feeling. comment mine if you can i just joined.
ElijahNoble replied...
May 19, 2010 at 12:20 am
I can, comment on mine too please?
kirbybug replied...
May 19, 2010 at 8:21 am
great!!! loved the details!!! skstorc that would make 2 of us!!
FlamingTaco1479 said...
Jan. 29, 2010 at 9:47 am
I loved it. I loved the imagery and how you set the stanza's up. Nice job!
j-rye This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 29, 2010 at 12:37 am
this is really great!
please comment on my work:)
mellow_melon This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 7, 2010 at 2:48 pm
if youre going to say a poem is bad, then give some constructive critism, don't say it sucks
Joyful_angel said...
Dec. 16, 2009 at 8:47 pm
this is really good~~ keep up the work~
check out my work if u can
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