Jerk MAG

January 2, 2009
By Christina BRONZE, Clifton, Virginia
Christina BRONZE, Clifton, Virginia
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I love your voice,
your soft brown hair.
I love your eyes
and love your stare.

I love your laugh,
your cocky smirk,
your stupid jokes.
You precious jerk,

you know I do.
I want my hands
all through your hair
each treasured strand.

I’m wrapped around
your finger still.
Am I yet yours?
Your love does kill

the things I hold
so close to me
and yet you’re the
best jerk I see.



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on Aug. 16 2012 at 9:12 am
writer3499 GOLD, New Bedford, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"it's impossible to live without failing at something, unless you live so cautiously that you might has well not have lived at all-in which case you fail by default."
-J.K.Rowling

Fantastic!

on Aug. 1 2012 at 3:36 pm
ChickenLegHouse BRONZE, Brighton, Michigan
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Is rediculous a good thing now? I thought it was quite serious in a way.

KylieK GOLD said...
on Jul. 11 2012 at 9:42 pm
KylieK GOLD, Mt. Washington, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"To love is to surpass one's self."

You're rediculous! Never stop writing!!!

Ian_G said...
on Jul. 8 2012 at 7:58 pm
Ian_G, Ventnor, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"You never learn anything by doing it right."




* * * *
"You can go anywhere you want if you look serious and carry a clipboard."

I love this! It's so true too: how you can love and hate someone at the same time. lol-- keep writing!:)

justme242 GOLD said...
on Jul. 4 2012 at 10:26 am
justme242 GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
help will be given to those who ask for it.

great poem i had something like that 

on Jun. 30 2012 at 8:46 am
tayrobin BRONZE, Sydney, Other
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i love this so much :)

on Jun. 20 2012 at 12:14 pm
hahahha ikr i got the same thing

on Jun. 15 2012 at 8:12 pm
The-Silent-Call BRONZE, Cincinnati, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
\"Trust yourself, you know more than you think\" -Spock

I love the little contrast thing going on here, that beautiful jerk whose controlling, but you love him anyway. This is so true to life, the strange things in people we pick up and come to love. Very nicely done.

on Jun. 7 2012 at 2:08 am
starrynightangel BRONZE, Muscat, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Nostalgia is a seductive liar.

Actually, hate it when that happens..kind of sad.

on Jun. 7 2012 at 2:06 am
starrynightangel BRONZE, Muscat, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Nostalgia is a seductive liar.

Love this poem <3

You're good..!!


on May. 31 2012 at 1:40 am
Kenziemcm13 PLATINUM, Rutherfordton, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
A simple story can tell an entire story!~~ ME
Pictures tell a 1000 words~IDK :P

Great peice of work! Loved it! Absolutely loved it! May I ask that you read a few of mine they are not nearly as good but I would be honored if you read them and commented what I could do better? Please! :)

on May. 29 2012 at 7:36 pm
lgvwhiteman BRONZE, Glen, New York
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I think you have a great rhythm going and good rhymes, but there are some lines that could be made more powerful. For instence, "Your love does kill" loses some of its bite because the word 'does' isn't doing a lot of work. I would rework that line. 

on May. 22 2012 at 1:06 pm
forevermore147, Godley, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Always remember you are braver than you believe, stronger than you seem, smarter than you think and twice as beautiful as you'd ever imagined.
- Patti Rooks

wow i love it!!! very very good

latrel said...
on May. 21 2012 at 12:52 pm
I like the metaphors and the stanzas are fantastic!

bluhs said...
on May. 20 2012 at 2:20 pm
bluhs, E, Alabama
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That was a very well-written poem. Good job and keep writing.

on May. 17 2012 at 6:39 pm
mindless_dreaming BRONZE, Wyckoff, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"May make my heart as a millstone, set my face as a flint, Cheat and be cheated, and die: who knows? We are ashes and we are dust." -Alfred, Lord Tennyson, 'Maud'

totally relatable and really good descriptions, very good! :)

GotSoccer19 said...
on May. 6 2012 at 3:55 pm
GotSoccer19, Dallas, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"A real athlete knows that there's no off-season."

That. Was. So. Amazingly. Good. I can totally relate to that. 

chips said...
on May. 3 2012 at 2:31 pm
I enjoyed the oxymoron about the jerk being special. I also liked the metaphor you used when you were talking about his cocky smirk. great job

airjohnnys said...
on May. 3 2012 at 12:56 pm

I like how the person you're talking about is a likeable jerk and you're using metaphors and oxymorons

 


on May. 3 2012 at 12:20 pm
rebeckabear BRONZE, Escondido, California
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Favorite Quote:
live life to the fullest

this writing is very cool i wish i had a jerk in my life that i like write on. you know whats right, sit down and write


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