The Body MAG

December 5, 2008
By L.Neale BRONZE, Brighton, Other
L.Neale BRONZE, Brighton, Other
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Is a body unconscious a person still?
No mind is present to govern its deeds.
Does a body have dreams, or a fate to fulfill?
No way to feel it when it bleeds.
Can I be a human, too?
Maybe I’m not even real.
But I am flesh, through and through?
Scratch it up, then let it heal.
Or can a monster have a mind?
An evil thing, or weeping ghost.
Are living and breathing intertwined?
A being punished for its host.
With electrical thoughts, is it ever alive?
Just a skin, an empty shell.
Is the soul really needed for the body to thrive?
A carcass washed up on the shores of hell.



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on Mar. 17 2009 at 1:50 am
Very very good style of writing !!

L.Neale BRONZE said...
on Mar. 16 2009 at 4:30 pm
L.Neale BRONZE, Brighton, Other
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@ItsCourtneyKidds the original format was actually in couplets, as question, question, answer, answer, but I had to change it to make sense.

on Mar. 15 2009 at 7:02 pm
You're an extremely talented writer.

if you're rhymes were next to each other you would have rhymed cuplets which is an intriguing peice of art when someone can do it. kudos for you(:

on Mar. 13 2009 at 8:20 pm
xxbakerbabyxx DIAMOND, Coatesville, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"life will only controll youh if youh let it"

i can connect to this poem greatly u have a great amount of talent and its great the way you use it

mstampfler said...
on Mar. 13 2009 at 5:51 pm
I really like this, my mind always tends to wander to this subject. You put these thoughts into marvelous words.

on Mar. 7 2009 at 6:25 pm
lindsayjo BRONZE, Aylmer, Other
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really like this.

on Mar. 5 2009 at 8:18 pm
iAmTheStardust PLATINUM, Moon Twp., Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"The prettiest flowers grow in the biggest pile of manure."

hey, i live in the us, but my family's from uk!

L.Neale BRONZE said...
on Mar. 5 2009 at 5:10 pm
L.Neale BRONZE, Brighton, Other
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Aw, thanks guys XD! You made me smile today.

on Mar. 5 2009 at 12:35 am
cathepoet SILVER, Kiester, Minnesota
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I LOVE this poem. It has a great rhythm to it and it really makes you think..kind of mysterious sounding

on Mar. 3 2009 at 8:31 pm
kissingdawn331 SILVER, Palatine, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"when your hourglass runs out of sand you can't flip it over and start again."(changes weekly so check next weeks l8er)

wow it DOES make you think great job

on Mar. 3 2009 at 4:10 pm
AndThisIsReal PLATINUM, Broadalbin, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Dans chaque fil il y a un debut.

This was very interesting.

Makes you think.

xjustlistenx said...
on Mar. 2 2009 at 1:52 am
WOW that was trully an interesting read! keep going

on Feb. 28 2009 at 10:29 pm
EternityBroken GOLD, Hooker, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
It is impossible to love and be wise.

awesome


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