The Body MAG

December 5, 2008
By L.Neale BRONZE, Brighton, Other
L.Neale BRONZE, Brighton, Other
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Is a body unconscious a person still?
No mind is present to govern its deeds.
Does a body have dreams, or a fate to fulfill?
No way to feel it when it bleeds.
Can I be a human, too?
Maybe I’m not even real.
But I am flesh, through and through?
Scratch it up, then let it heal.
Or can a monster have a mind?
An evil thing, or weeping ghost.
Are living and breathing intertwined?
A being punished for its host.
With electrical thoughts, is it ever alive?
Just a skin, an empty shell.
Is the soul really needed for the body to thrive?
A carcass washed up on the shores of hell.



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bestseller12 said...
on Dec. 13 2010 at 10:08 pm
Unique and different. Truly original. Great.

E.Lee GOLD said...
on Dec. 13 2010 at 8:28 pm
E.Lee GOLD, Akron, Ohio
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wow. that was incredible! i loved it. it really makes you think..perfect. =]

on Nov. 30 2010 at 11:14 pm
AliMallie BRONZE, Westminster, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm selfish, impatient, and a little insecure. I make mistakes. I am out of control and at times, hard to handle, but if you can't handle me at my worst, then you sure as hell don't deserve me at my best." -Marilyn Monroe

Beast. That was prefectly constructed and intriguing. Please continue to write.

OneHotMes$4L said...
on Nov. 30 2010 at 12:09 pm
Wow. This poem really made me think about the meaning and the descriptive words. Its refreshing in an odd sort of way. Kind of cleanses the soul. The end left me wanting more yet satisfied me to say the least. Anyways, Great poem. Awesome writing skills and good use of vocabulary.

on Nov. 30 2010 at 9:41 am
fadingaway1324 SILVER, Latrobe, Pennsylvania
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its hard to ever tell whats real or isn't. beautiful.

on Nov. 28 2010 at 12:50 pm
LeonorEmmalyn, Arroyo Hondo, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"I hold with those who favor fire."
"Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, and I-- I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference."

I love this!!

on Nov. 8 2010 at 10:17 pm
Hailey Such SILVER, Ellicott City, Maryland
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This is fantastic!

on Nov. 8 2010 at 10:04 pm
Karamel PLATINUM, Gwinn, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Clever people will recognize and tolerate nothing but cleverness." -Anonymous

"A being punished for its host..." I loved that line, and I think everyone can relate to it. This is fantastic.

on Sep. 25 2010 at 6:23 pm
Phantom_Girl GOLD, Ft. Carson, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"If it comes out of the lion's mouth...it will be on the test."
-Mr. Bala

That...was...AMAZING!!!!!! It's so refreshing to actually have to use my brain to interpret a meaning for the poem. Most people make the meaning really obvious-which is fine, especially when trying to express emotions-but I LOVE being forced to THINK about a poem's meaning, and this certainly did make me think!

on Sep. 3 2010 at 2:32 pm
The_Squirrel GOLD, Port Alberni, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I will because I can, I can because I want to, I want to becasue you said I couldn't.

 is absolutely amazing. You have a great way with words and I'm really gratefull for you writing it. I know you probably hate when people ask this, and honestly so do I, but could you maybe read my poems? only 'For you I am' is a good one, so could I get some constructive criticsm?

sydni GOLD said...
on Sep. 3 2010 at 11:52 am
sydni GOLD, Boca Raton, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"I’m going to paraphrase Thoreau here… rather than love, than money, than faith, than fame, than fairness… give me truth.” into the wild

This is fantastic. True artwork, your writing is clever and well thought. Keep writing, you will go far. 

on Aug. 12 2010 at 5:44 pm
sunrise_faerie GOLD, Fredericksburg, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
things are only as dark as you make them.
there is always beauty in every situation. look for it and you will see.
smile; sometimes it's all that will keep you from crying.

wow. best poem i've read in a LONG time!!!!! i'm nowhere near as talented as you, but is it possible that you could.... read some of my things? thanks!!! keep it up!!!!!!

on Jul. 20 2010 at 9:54 pm
nickykens ELITE, Draper, Utah
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This is absolutely amazing.  There are so many ways you can take it.  It makes you think, and the flow is very good and the rhymes are simple, yet creative. 

on Jun. 29 2010 at 8:59 pm
the_quiet_one BRONZE, Orangevale, California
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Favorite Quote:
“I write for no other purpose than to add to the beauty that now belongs to me. I write a story for no other reason than to add three or four hundred acres to my magnificent estate.”
~Jack London (White Fang)

Wow. I've been writing poetry lately, and your poem reminds me of how I write, how I'd like to write. It is a very powerful piece, it feels to me that you're questioning reality and you twist it perfectly with your voice. 

on Jun. 29 2010 at 3:41 pm
ShenelleCrystal SILVER, M, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Laugh your heart out dance in the rain cherish the memories ignore the pain love + learn forget and forgive because remember you only have [one life to live] ♥

this is great , keep it up . if you mind can you please come and check my work :) thanksss

on Jun. 29 2010 at 9:09 am
haventy0uheard PLATINUM, Kings Park, New York
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this is amazing, it really makes you think. nice job!:)

on Jun. 29 2010 at 1:42 am
DannyKid33 PLATINUM, Pleasant Hill, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't ever let the media tell you what to look like. You're beautiful the way you are. Stay beautiful, keep it ugly." - Gerard Way.

absolutely amazing...jst wow... i cant put this into words

on May. 10 2010 at 5:31 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

this stuff is really good. I love the rhyming scheme. it seems to come so easy to you like your writing these marvelous works while being shot at.  5 stars.

Shahed GOLD said...
on May. 9 2010 at 3:03 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

I love it, its amazing!!! I gave you 5 stars, if theY had 10 then I would've gave you that! <3 amazing!

Check out my work, Let me know what you think through the comments, I like it when good writers comment on my work :)


Electricity said...
on Apr. 26 2010 at 9:10 am
This is deep and beautiful. I love it. Great job!




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