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September 6, 2008
By Binte SILVER, -, Other
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I walked to heaven’s gate today
among the skies so blue
with angels lurking here and there
waiting for someone new

I looked around for other souls
but the sky was empty so
i made my way to heaven’s gate
following the angels’ glow

when i reached, the angels all
blocked the gate in view
i boldly looked ahead and asked
please may i pass through?

You think it’s so easy then?
their voices echoed in my ears
how about you tell us what you did
all those earthly years?

I never skipped a day of school
and always helped the poor
I was happy with what i had
and never asked for more

so you deserve the life, they asked
beyond this eternal gate?
since you lived and liked and loved
heaven becomes your fate?

oh, no, it’s not so easy, child
you can’t just walk right by
have you forgetten what man is like?
they said with fiery eyes

I shook with fear but simply said
I know that man is wild
how is it though my fault at all?
i am just a child

But if your time had not come
and you still walked the earth
you too would be just like those
who raised and gave you birth

they care for only looks and gold
and kill their fellow beings
they cheat their friends and foes alike
and bomb those peaceful fields

they have no shame and honor left
like men used to have before
so why’d you think that heaven
has place for man anymore?

I closed my eyes in silence
my soul was now at stake
and I would have to suffer
for other men’s mistakes

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ilovevolleyball35 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 20 2011 at 6:58 pm
ilovevolleyball35 BRONZE, Greenback, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
You have enemies? Good, that means you've stood up for something in your life.
-Winston Churchill

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I really love this!! Great work(:
Artist4lif3 said...
on Apr. 3 2011 at 11:51 am
Artist4lif3, PHOENIX, Arizona
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So it's not gonna be easy. It's gonna be really hard. We're gonna have to work at this every day, but I want to do that because I want you. I want all of you, for ever, you and me, every day. Will you do something for me, please? Just picture your life for me? 30 years from now, 40 years from now? What's it look like? If it's with him, go. Go! I lost you once, I think I can do it again. If I thought that's what you really wanted. But don't you take the easy way out.

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LOVED IT!!!! i rlly like how in the last stanza you left the reader hangin, wondering what happened:)) KEEP IT UP!
buggzbunnie BRONZE said...
on Mar. 30 2011 at 9:49 pm
buggzbunnie BRONZE, Middle River, Maryland
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this is the best i have read yet this poem is indescribable . the last stanza sent tingles through my body . fantastic job !
WerewolfWriting BRONZE said...
on Jan. 19 2011 at 4:50 pm
WerewolfWriting BRONZE, Eerie, Nevada
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Oh my gosh! This was INCREDIBLE. Not only was the rhyme sceme perfect, but each line was neat and sensible and perfectly at place. You are a fantastic poet! 5 stars times 1,000,000! Good job! :)
z-bo_teh_post_legend said...
on Jan. 19 2011 at 1:27 pm
this imagery was so beautiful... It gave me such a good picture of everything in the poem.
truelyblue said...
on Jan. 19 2011 at 11:39 am
This ballad spoke to me! I feel as if i am talking to the angnles
Alasia said...
on Jan. 14 2011 at 5:49 pm
Alasia, Bradenton, Florida
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great great great is all i can say!!!!!
HeatherBee BRONZE said...
on Jan. 9 2011 at 10:18 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

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Wow, that was an amazing poem!!! Excellent work!!! :D
Sissybug2012 PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 31 2010 at 12:39 pm
Sissybug2012 PLATINUM, Union, Missouri
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"the greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return." -MOULIN ROUGE (song lyrics)

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BRAVO! HOW PRETTY! FANTASTIC! AMAZING! too many words to describe it.....
red rose said...
on Dec. 9 2010 at 2:01 pm
myyyyyyy favorite
LeonorEmmalyn said...
on Nov. 25 2010 at 6:43 pm
LeonorEmmalyn, Arroyo Hondo, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"I hold with those who favor fire."
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this is soooo good!!! it's one of my favorites:)))
Jolvin SILVER said...
on Nov. 14 2010 at 5:34 pm
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Really nice!!
I_Am_A_Dreamer BRONZE said...
on Sep. 12 2010 at 5:13 pm
I_Am_A_Dreamer BRONZE, Highlands Ranch, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
Have something to say, and say it as clearly as you can. That is the only secret.
- Matthew Arnold

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This is so good! Totally 5 stars!
chastity SILVER said...
on Sep. 12 2010 at 4:26 pm
chastity SILVER, Beckley, West Virginia
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i love it it gets in details
silence-is-loud GOLD said...
on Aug. 18 2010 at 9:27 pm
silence-is-loud GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
FLOAT LIKE A BUTTERFLY, STING LIKE A BEE- MUHAMMID ALI

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LOVE IT!!! gosh... so descriptive. couldnt be better. 5 stars

 

DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD said...
on Aug. 18 2010 at 12:05 pm
DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD, Martinsville, New Jersey
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Worry is simply a misuse of the imagination.

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A. MAZE. ING. this is awesome. how its poetic and speechy.  and how even though it was a little long you held my attention.  awesome.
TheOcherousRodentia PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 30 2010 at 9:42 am
TheOcherousRodentia PLATINUM, Toronto, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Life is infinitely growing;
It's capacity of love and fear is impossible
To calculate by the means of math, or
The properties of science, and to conatain
Its ferious unpredictability is only a virtue
That humans despire

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CLAP CLAP CLAP! IT WAS AMAZING, YOU ARE AMAZING! I loved how you gave poetic speech to the characters in the poems, and made it flow smoothly. The message is just inspiring, and touching. And it didnt use the descriptive cliche of angels with feathered wings, or standing on clouds, you indirectly made the reader imagine their own heaven! GREAT WORK, keep it up, you get 10 STARS(too bad theres only 5)
Jellybean9898 PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 1 2010 at 4:03 pm
Jellybean9898 PLATINUM, Glendale, California
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"When nothing goes right, go left"-Anonymous
"Thank God men cannot fly, and lay waste to the sky as well as the Earth"-Henry David Thoreau

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this was really good, and i really admire your work.  i think it is so true, how man on earth is pretty destructive.  call me a peace-lovin hippie, but those angels are right!  and great job on the poem overall, btw.  i liked it a lot. :)  check out my work?
StandardToaster PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 28 2010 at 7:15 pm
StandardToaster PLATINUM, Pasadena, California
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oh my gosh, this really sent a shiver down my spine!  this is so haunting and true at the same time.  people better shape up i guess!  check out my work plz?
shocking. GOLD said...
on Jun. 13 2010 at 1:55 pm
shocking. GOLD, West Bloomfield, Michigan
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this is amazing! it really deep! great job :)