Heaven's Gate MAG

September 6, 2008
By Binte SILVER, -, Other
Binte SILVER, -, Other
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I walked to heaven’s gate today
among the skies so blue
with angels lurking here and there
waiting for someone new

I looked around for other souls
but the sky was empty so
i made my way to heaven’s gate
following the angels’ glow

when i reached, the angels all
blocked the gate in view
i boldly looked ahead and asked
please may i pass through?

You think it’s so easy then?
their voices echoed in my ears
how about you tell us what you did
all those earthly years?

I never skipped a day of school
and always helped the poor
I was happy with what i had
and never asked for more

so you deserve the life, they asked
beyond this eternal gate?
since you lived and liked and loved
heaven becomes your fate?

oh, no, it’s not so easy, child
you can’t just walk right by
have you forgetten what man is like?
they said with fiery eyes

I shook with fear but simply said
I know that man is wild
how is it though my fault at all?
i am just a child

But if your time had not come
and you still walked the earth
you too would be just like those
who raised and gave you birth

they care for only looks and gold
and kill their fellow beings
they cheat their friends and foes alike
and bomb those peaceful fields

they have no shame and honor left
like men used to have before
so why’d you think that heaven
has place for man anymore?

I closed my eyes in silence
my soul was now at stake
and I would have to suffer
for other men’s mistakes


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on Apr. 20 2011 at 6:58 pm
ilovevolleyball35 BRONZE, Greenback, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
You have enemies? Good, that means you've stood up for something in your life.
-Winston Churchill

I really love this!! Great work(:

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on Apr. 3 2011 at 11:51 am
Artist4lif3, PHOENIX, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
So it's not gonna be easy. It's gonna be really hard. We're gonna have to work at this every day, but I want to do that because I want you. I want all of you, for ever, you and me, every day. Will you do something for me, please? Just picture your life for me? 30 years from now, 40 years from now? What's it look like? If it's with him, go. Go! I lost you once, I think I can do it again. If I thought that's what you really wanted. But don't you take the easy way out.

LOVED IT!!!! i rlly like how in the last stanza you left the reader hangin, wondering what happened:)) KEEP IT UP!

on Mar. 30 2011 at 9:49 pm
buggzbunnie BRONZE, Middle River, Maryland
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this is the best i have read yet this poem is indescribable . the last stanza sent tingles through my body . fantastic job !

on Jan. 19 2011 at 4:50 pm
WerewolfWriting BRONZE, Eerie, Nevada
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Favorite Quote:
"Life is not about the breaths we take but about the people who take our breath away."

Oh my gosh! This was INCREDIBLE. Not only was the rhyme sceme perfect, but each line was neat and sensible and perfectly at place. You are a fantastic poet! 5 stars times 1,000,000! Good job! :)

on Jan. 19 2011 at 1:27 pm
this imagery was so beautiful... It gave me such a good picture of everything in the poem.

truelyblue said...
on Jan. 19 2011 at 11:39 am
This ballad spoke to me! I feel as if i am talking to the angnles

Alasia said...
on Jan. 14 2011 at 5:49 pm
Alasia, Bradenton, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Don't follow a path, make your own, and leave a trail.

great great great is all i can say!!!!!

on Jan. 9 2011 at 10:18 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

Wow, that was an amazing poem!!! Excellent work!!! :D

on Dec. 31 2010 at 12:39 pm
Sissybug2012 PLATINUM, Union, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"the greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return." -MOULIN ROUGE (song lyrics)

BRAVO! HOW PRETTY! FANTASTIC! AMAZING! too many words to describe it.....

red rose said...
on Dec. 9 2010 at 2:01 pm
myyyyyyy favorite

on Nov. 25 2010 at 6:43 pm
LeonorEmmalyn, Arroyo Hondo, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"I hold with those who favor fire."
"Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, and I-- I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference."

this is soooo good!!! it's one of my favorites:)))

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on Nov. 14 2010 at 5:34 pm
Jolvin SILVER, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"There are two ways of spreading light; to be the candle or mirror that reflects it." - Edith Wharton

Really nice!!

on Sep. 12 2010 at 5:13 pm
I_Am_A_Dreamer BRONZE, Highlands Ranch, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
Have something to say, and say it as clearly as you can. That is the only secret.
- Matthew Arnold

This is so good! Totally 5 stars!

on Sep. 12 2010 at 4:26 pm
chastity SILVER, Beckley, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
take me as i am or take me as i leave

i love it it gets in details

on Aug. 18 2010 at 9:27 pm
silence-is-loud GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
FLOAT LIKE A BUTTERFLY, STING LIKE A BEE- MUHAMMID ALI

LOVE IT!!! gosh... so descriptive. couldnt be better. 5 stars

 


on Aug. 18 2010 at 12:05 pm
DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD, Martinsville, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Worry is simply a misuse of the imagination.

A. MAZE. ING. this is awesome. how its poetic and speechy.  and how even though it was a little long you held my attention.  awesome.

on Jul. 30 2010 at 9:42 am
TheOcherousRodentia PLATINUM, Toronto, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Life is infinitely growing;
It's capacity of love and fear is impossible
To calculate by the means of math, or
The properties of science, and to conatain
Its ferious unpredictability is only a virtue
That humans despire

CLAP CLAP CLAP! IT WAS AMAZING, YOU ARE AMAZING! I loved how you gave poetic speech to the characters in the poems, and made it flow smoothly. The message is just inspiring, and touching. And it didnt use the descriptive cliche of angels with feathered wings, or standing on clouds, you indirectly made the reader imagine their own heaven! GREAT WORK, keep it up, you get 10 STARS(too bad theres only 5)

on Jul. 1 2010 at 4:03 pm
Jellybean9898 PLATINUM, Glendale, California
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Favorite Quote:
"When nothing goes right, go left"-Anonymous
"Thank God men cannot fly, and lay waste to the sky as well as the Earth"-Henry David Thoreau

this was really good, and i really admire your work.  i think it is so true, how man on earth is pretty destructive.  call me a peace-lovin hippie, but those angels are right!  and great job on the poem overall, btw.  i liked it a lot. :)  check out my work?

on Jun. 28 2010 at 7:15 pm
StandardToaster PLATINUM, Pasadena, California
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Favorite Quote:
I don't suffer from insanity; I enjoy ever minute of it."

oh my gosh, this really sent a shiver down my spine!  this is so haunting and true at the same time.  people better shape up i guess!  check out my work plz?

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on Jun. 13 2010 at 1:55 pm
shocking. GOLD, West Bloomfield, Michigan
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this is amazing! it really deep! great job :)




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