A Maze

March 20, 2012
By TimmyTiger GOLD, Somewhere, Indiana
TimmyTiger GOLD, Somewhere, Indiana
10 articles 1 photo 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's time to nut up, or shut up." - Woodey Harrelson "Zombieland"


When I finally think I’ve chosen the right path,
It comes to a dead end.
Bleeding and broken, I pick myself up
And start over again.
The never ending halls
Have taken their horrid toll.
Walking the same path everyday,
An empty, soulless hull.
I’m losing hope of ever finding
This fabled way out.
All my faith and strength is gone....
All I have is doubt.
This maze is made of my memories....
The ones that haunt me day to day.
My dreams of happiness are gone.
This maze is now my cage.
Trapped inside my head,
Spinning in the past.
I’ve been in here too long..
I fear I will not last.
With darkness pressing in,
And monsters on my heels,
I can no longer tell what’s fake
From what that is real.
One day I will fall.
I will no longer how strength to strive.
I shall dread the day I realize...
I won’t make it out alive.


The author's comments:
Most people have felt this; hopeless and lost. But remember, there is always light at the end of the hall. Never give up.

Similar Articles

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 20 comments.


on Oct. 22 2012 at 9:05 pm
holyblondecheerleaderbatman BRONZE, Wasilla, Alaska
1 article 2 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
Who said I want to fit in ?

it was full of emotion and it really grabbed a hold of were it needed to :) <3 love it 

on Oct. 12 2012 at 7:11 pm
Llyxomisacutie SILVER, Gilbert, Arizona
7 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A steaming cup of Hot cocoa can make just about any day a little sweeter~"

wow, that was so dark and mystery, so so very depressing but delicious! I loved it! Please do write more!

on Oct. 12 2012 at 7:08 pm
SpecialsForLife BRONZE, Silt, Colorado
2 articles 9 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
Straight Americans need... an education of the heart and soul. They must understand - to begin with - how it can feel to spend years denying your own deepest truths, to sit silently through classes, meals, and church services while people you love toss off remarks that brutalize your soul. ~Bruce Bawer, The Advocate, 28 April 1998

I don't like it.. But I gave it 5 stars.. Jk! But I did give it 5 stars.

hypermagical said...
on Jun. 3 2012 at 9:06 am
hypermagical, Indianapolis, Indiana
0 articles 0 photos 144 comments

Favorite Quote:
You can quote me on that.

I feel exactly the same, sometimes!!! how did you know? *looks around suspiciously*

DanielM. said...
on Apr. 28 2012 at 9:47 am
Great Job!! i really liked your message. Its true we shouldn't give up. Awesome Job!!

on Apr. 6 2012 at 1:17 pm
compassion GOLD, Nowhere, Other
12 articles 17 photos 154 comments

Favorite Quote:
Expect to have hope rekindled,expect your prayers to be answered in wondrous ways! The dry seasons in life do not last,the spring rains will come again.

there's light i mean!

on Apr. 6 2012 at 1:14 pm
compassion GOLD, Nowhere, Other
12 articles 17 photos 154 comments

Favorite Quote:
Expect to have hope rekindled,expect your prayers to be answered in wondrous ways! The dry seasons in life do not last,the spring rains will come again.

excuse me ?how can you steal my feelings and write it down?lol.that was awesome.thats excatly how i feel now. though i feel it that way i always have hope that my god wont let me down:)so yeah there light everyone:)

on Apr. 5 2012 at 8:46 pm
_ella_herondale BRONZE, San Diego, California
4 articles 2 photos 224 comments

Favorite Quote:
"...If the Thames that ran beside them...recalled a night where the moon shone as brightly as a shilling on the same boy and girl... and thought to themselves, 'at last, the wheel comes full circle,' they kept their silence."

O and btw i like how the note you made really made sense with the poem. Sometimes they dont

on Apr. 5 2012 at 8:45 pm
_ella_herondale BRONZE, San Diego, California
4 articles 2 photos 224 comments

Favorite Quote:
"...If the Thames that ran beside them...recalled a night where the moon shone as brightly as a shilling on the same boy and girl... and thought to themselves, 'at last, the wheel comes full circle,' they kept their silence."

"I fear I will not last.
With darkness pressing in,
And monsters on my heels,
I can no longer tell what’s fake
From what that is real."

loved that part especially. really good job!


on Apr. 1 2012 at 1:36 pm
Just-Another-Girl GOLD, Keighley, Other
17 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
- "A coward may survive...but a hero..a hero lives on in the hearts of the people he saved"

- "Words don't have the power to hurt people, unless the person who said it means a lot"

-
You say that love is nonsense. I tell you it is no such thing._

wow timmy tiger this is amazing

on Mar. 30 2012 at 11:03 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Beautiful, your use of language and rhyme is really good, thanks for sharing! 

on Mar. 30 2012 at 8:36 pm
BalladOfMonaLisa PLATINUM, Na, Other
24 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love and to be loved; to hurt and to be hurt. These are the ideals that make up humanity. ~Me (Lisa)

Wow this is really good! Sort of similar to something i might write :P

on Mar. 29 2012 at 9:32 am
WritingVincent SILVER, Calgary, Other
7 articles 1 photo 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything comes from something."

Gooood, very goood. I liked it, at first I thought it was just another poem with no real meaning but only wannabe thoughts; then I read on and felt moved and made connections with it. Nicely done.

Form:  3/5 stars
Word usage:  4/5 stars
Meaning:  4/5 stars
Language convention:  5/5 stars

Total stars:  4/5 stars


deleted said...
on Mar. 26 2012 at 12:54 pm
deleted, Miami, Florida
0 articles 0 photos 195 comments
Wow this is really powerful!! Good imagery and reflection of emotion, I love it :)

SuM3rLOv3 said...
on Mar. 23 2012 at 11:27 pm
SuM3rLOv3, NSW, Other
0 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am the author of my life. Unfortunately, I'm writing in pen and can't erase my mistakes.

wow this is awesome and really strong

TapTap SILVER said...
on Mar. 23 2012 at 9:25 pm
TapTap SILVER, New Berlin, Wisconsin
8 articles 0 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dream as if you'll live forever, love like there is no tomorrow, dance like there is no one watching.

*cries* I wasn't the first to comment!!! Anyways, words cannot describe this, and to know that you had to feel this to make this work of art is...gruesome. You better keep writing. ;)

on Mar. 23 2012 at 9:24 pm
ImagineBlueRoses SILVER, Derby, Kansas
5 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
Were it not for music, we might in these days say, the Beautiful is dead.

Lovely :) I found myself there so many times!

on Mar. 23 2012 at 8:19 pm
Kit-Kait BRONZE, Amherst, Virginia
1 article 0 photos 54 comments
Timmy, you're gonna give me a heart attack. Call the ambulence. You create inspiring feats of knowledge and... sensitivity. You can say the wildest of things, and people don't wanna hit you. Good job, Tim. Keep writing, please. We're addicted to your works!

on Mar. 23 2012 at 6:26 pm
Lady_Lemon GOLD, Franklin, Wisconsin
11 articles 1 photo 43 comments
Oh dear! My pearls! *clutches pearl neclace like an old grandmother* that was just... just so... soooo..... AMAZING!! :) Loved it Timmy-dear, fantabulous job, keept up the good work. 

on Mar. 23 2012 at 6:25 pm
Princesspiper84 SILVER, Lodi, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Motto: There's no life without death, mistakes, and missury

Wow strong stuff not bad great job keep writing!!!

 



Parkland Book