A Maze

March 20, 2012
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When I finally think I’ve chosen the right path,
It comes to a dead end.
Bleeding and broken, I pick myself up
And start over again.
The never ending halls
Have taken their horrid toll.
Walking the same path everyday,
An empty, soulless hull.
I’m losing hope of ever finding
This fabled way out.
All my faith and strength is gone....
All I have is doubt.
This maze is made of my memories....
The ones that haunt me day to day.
My dreams of happiness are gone.
This maze is now my cage.
Trapped inside my head,
Spinning in the past.
I’ve been in here too long..
I fear I will not last.
With darkness pressing in,
And monsters on my heels,
I can no longer tell what’s fake
From what that is real.
One day I will fall.
I will no longer how strength to strive.
I shall dread the day I realize...
I won’t make it out alive.

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holyblondecheerleaderbatman said...
Oct. 22, 2012 at 9:05 pm
it was full of emotion and it really grabbed a hold of were it needed to :) <3 love it 
Llyxomisacutie said...
Oct. 12, 2012 at 7:11 pm
wow, that was so dark and mystery, so so very depressing but delicious! I loved it! Please do write more!
DA_WithoutCare said...
Oct. 12, 2012 at 7:08 pm
I don't like it.. But I gave it 5 stars.. Jk! But I did give it 5 stars.
hypermagical said...
Jun. 3, 2012 at 9:06 am
I feel exactly the same, sometimes!!! how did you know? *looks around suspiciously*
DanielM. said...
Apr. 28, 2012 at 9:47 am
Great Job!! i really liked your message. Its true we shouldn't give up. Awesome Job!!
compassion said...
Apr. 6, 2012 at 1:17 pm
there's light i mean!
compassion said...
Apr. 6, 2012 at 1:14 pm
excuse me ?how can you steal my feelings and write it down?lol.that was awesome.thats excatly how i feel now. though i feel it that way i always have hope that my god wont let me down:)so yeah there light everyone:)
SilverSun said...
Apr. 5, 2012 at 8:45 pm

"I fear I will not last.
With darkness pressing in,
And monsters on my heels,
I can no longer tell what’s fake
From what that is real."

loved that part especially. really good job!

SilverSun replied...
Apr. 5, 2012 at 8:46 pm
O and btw i like how the note you made really made sense with the poem. Sometimes they dont
QueenCourt said...
Apr. 1, 2012 at 1:36 pm
wow timmy tiger this is amazing
IamtheshyStargirl said...
Mar. 30, 2012 at 11:03 pm
Beautiful, your use of language and rhyme is really good, thanks for sharing! 
newsoulpoet said...
Mar. 30, 2012 at 8:36 pm
Wow this is really good! Sort of similar to something i might write :P
TheVinny1996 said...
Mar. 29, 2012 at 9:32 am

Gooood, very goood. I liked it, at first I thought it was just another poem with no real meaning but only wannabe thoughts; then I read on and felt moved and made connections with it. Nicely done.

Form:  3/5 stars
Word usage:  4/5 stars
Meaning:  4/5 stars
Language convention:  5/5 stars

Total stars:  4/5 stars

torilutz8 said...
Mar. 26, 2012 at 12:54 pm
Wow this is really powerful!! Good imagery and reflection of emotion, I love it :)
SuM3rLOv3 said...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 11:27 pm
wow this is awesome and really strong
taptap said...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 9:25 pm
*cries* I wasn't the first to comment!!! Anyways, words cannot describe this, and to know that you had to feel this to make this work of art is...gruesome. You better keep writing. ;)
PinkSparksFly said...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 9:24 pm
Lovely :) I found myself there so many times!
DreamsOfGold said...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 8:19 pm
Timmy, you're gonna give me a heart attack. Call the ambulence. You create inspiring feats of knowledge and... sensitivity. You can say the wildest of things, and people don't wanna hit you. Good job, Tim. Keep writing, please. We're addicted to your works!
DaLemon said...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 6:26 pm
Oh dear! My pearls! *clutches pearl neclace like an old grandmother* that was just... just so... soooo..... AMAZING!! :) Loved it Timmy-dear, fantabulous job, keept up the good work. 
Aphrodite84 said...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 6:25 pm

Wow strong stuff not bad great job keep writing!!!


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