I Went Walking

June 25, 2011
By StrangeJade PLATINUM, Relative Obscurity, California
StrangeJade PLATINUM, Relative Obscurity, California
36 articles 17 photos 391 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is so beautiful that death has fallen in love with it." - Life of Pi


When I went walking, I followed my feet
On to the end of the end of the street
Following that, I walked on some more,
Finding my feet at a far-distant shore.

Not at all hindered by the ocean’s vast size,
I decided continuing would be most wise.
So I followed my feet, footsteps trailing behind,
Up to my ears in green-and-blue brine.

Though I’d now lost my hold on the floor of the sea,
It presented no real sort of challenge for me.
I swam for a while at rather good pace,
The sky and the sea closing in on my face.

And so this went on, for a week or so more,
‘Til my feet once again touched a far-distant shore.
Pleased at my progress, I then left the sea,
My footsteps emerging quite soon after me.

I walked on, I walked on, I saw cities and towns
I followed my feet, which followed the ground.
I saw marvelous things that I’d try to describe,
But I haven’t the words. Or the space. Or the time.

Over many a country I wandered, you know,
Never quite sure of where next I would go.
But I always kept on, wondering too
Where I would end up when my journey was through.

On the twenty-eighth week (and a few days besides),
I followed my feet to a soft, lapping tide.
My footsteps behind me, I jumped in once more
And swam for a month to the opposite shore.

And when I touched land, why, I kept going on!
Over mountain and valley, through evening and dawn.
Where was I going? I couldn’t have bet,
But wherever it was, well, I wasn’t there yet.

But then as I rounded the crest of a hill,
I saw something familiar and quiet and still.
I ran down to meet it, I followed my feet,
And soon recognized my own house, my own street.

And there in the dirt, and there, in my yard,
Were somebody’s footsteps, weathered and hard.
I stepped in them, wondering whose they could be,
And I stopped, and I noticed they belonged to me.

My feet would not walk; my prize had been won.
I’d gone clear round the earth, and my journey was done.
Happy like that, I stayed there, quite fulfilled:
I’d done enough traveling. I’m standing there still.


The author's comments:
A little poem I wrote about a fictitious walk. Personally, I think it's kinda got a Dr Seuss feel to it.

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on Aug. 2 2011 at 12:44 pm
StrangeJade PLATINUM, Relative Obscurity, California
36 articles 17 photos 391 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is so beautiful that death has fallen in love with it." - Life of Pi

I'm glad you liked it!

on Aug. 2 2011 at 1:58 am
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
31 articles 6 photos 578 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

You just have so much writing talent. Seriously, how do you come up with this stuff. And I completely agree with the whole Dr. Seuss style. It deifinitely has that ring to it. Very, very well done. Every journey should be fulfilling. :)

on Jul. 19 2011 at 11:28 pm
StrangeJade PLATINUM, Relative Obscurity, California
36 articles 17 photos 391 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is so beautiful that death has fallen in love with it." - Life of Pi

Fear not, Momo, I shall not forget you! :) And I'm so glad you like this poem.

on Jul. 18 2011 at 2:41 pm

When  I'm a supermodel and you're an acclaimed and envied author, I hope you remember me. Haha! 

The poem is beautiful. Articulate. Eloquent. Impeccable. Momentous. Drastic. And yet, simple, because it has an almost childish pleasure to it.

On a serious note, this is flawless. I still can scarcely believe you have only recently been discovered. This writing and wording that flows from your soul is a true gift, Jad. I hope you make good use of it, for it may take you far! 


on Jul. 12 2011 at 5:23 pm
StrangeJade PLATINUM, Relative Obscurity, California
36 articles 17 photos 391 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is so beautiful that death has fallen in love with it." - Life of Pi

Thanks :) Just randomly popped into my head, really. *shrug*

on Jul. 12 2011 at 2:32 pm
pencilsFORhands SILVER, Boston, Massachusetts
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I really like it, nice rhythm

on Jul. 9 2011 at 1:05 pm
StrangeJade PLATINUM, Relative Obscurity, California
36 articles 17 photos 391 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is so beautiful that death has fallen in love with it." - Life of Pi

Thanks so much! :) I hope so!

on Jul. 9 2011 at 4:51 am
Writomania PLATINUM, New Delhi, Other
22 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
"What really does not kill you, will only make you stronger"- Kanye West
"If there was no electricity, we would've had to watch the television by candle light"- Joe Jonas
Nobody will ever win the Battle of the Sexes. There's just too much fraternizing with the enemy. ~Henry Kissinger

You take my word for it girl.

You're getting published in the next issue.

 



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