Make Believe MAG

By Amanda Bush, Milan, IL

We were doomed from the beginning,
Blinded from the start,
But nothing can be done
To fool a happy heart.
With each smile and giggle,
Every embrace and every kiss,
We were shooting toward a happy ending,
And we missed.
Cinderella lost her slipper
And it was never found.
Prince Charming came too late,
Now no one’s sleeping sound.
Pillows are soaking wet,
Hopes are all lost.
No more dancing in the clouds.
Dreams have all been tossed.
The fairy-tale warmth has left us
As winter’s setting in.
The storybook reads the end,
But where should we begin?
Now your heart strives to be broken,
And you long for lonely nights
This time our ship is sinking
We’re going down without a fight.



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faerest BRONZE said...
on Jun. 12 2011 at 2:07 pm
faerest BRONZE, St Paul, Minnesota
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this poem is soooo sad, its not a happy ending, but happy endings are what we're used to (well at least i am)...

on May. 25 2011 at 2:04 pm
HisPurePrincess ELITE, Flemington, New Jersey
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Yep it's a beautiful poem, and I really like it.  I just don't know why my poem "Just Thinking" won't get published.  I think it's as good as this is.  Sorry, yours is really good, I think.

on May. 6 2011 at 10:12 pm
APoeticLife BRONZE, North Bergen, New Jersey
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Fantastic.

on Apr. 25 2011 at 8:48 pm
PAOLA-ARLETTY BRONZE, Bronx, New York
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Favorite Quote:
(1) WITHIN YOU, I LOSE MYSELF. WITHOUT YOU, I FIND MYSELF WANTING TO BE LOST AGAIN.
(2) YEAH, BEING APATHETIC IS A PATHETIC WAY TO BE, BUT WHAT MATTERS TO YOU, DOES NOT MATTER TO ME
(3)

wow, this poem is honestly fabulous! I can see myself relating to it one day, when i go through a similar story!  I honestly think this poem is great!  keep up the good work

on Apr. 14 2011 at 9:49 pm
truly gifted! =)

Debbie1 SILVER said...
on Apr. 14 2011 at 5:05 pm
Debbie1 SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"As long as there is life, there is hope."

Wow! this was really good! Well written, and kinda emotional. love it!

on Apr. 14 2011 at 12:23 pm
forgottenpenname GOLD, Troy, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Carpe diem."

Love it... I like how it starts out all happy cheery and all that and by the end it's like a splash of cold water in the face; reality. Fantastic job on this! :)

RFarage said...
on Apr. 6 2011 at 12:25 pm
Great comparisons, great poem. (: !

kvater said...
on Apr. 6 2011 at 12:14 pm
i really liked how they compared it to cinderella

SierrahS GOLD said...
on Apr. 5 2011 at 6:22 pm
SierrahS GOLD, Bronx, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Be a leader, not a follower

amazing :D

Free- GOLD said...
on Mar. 25 2011 at 4:50 pm
Free- GOLD, Blllll, Kentucky
14 articles 1 photo 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I believe in you and I believe in me, and I believe that we are not meaningless."
"What a waste of a perfectly good wrist."

AMAZING!

your rhyming was not annoying but worked beautifully with the flow and theme of your writing

brave:)

 

come look at my stuff(:


on Mar. 23 2011 at 6:22 pm
KelseyM.McNamara SILVER, Camarillo, California
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really good! i liked how u compared it 2 cinderella! :)

l.iney DIAMOND said...
on Mar. 19 2011 at 3:17 pm
l.iney DIAMOND, Shrewsbury, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
100% of shots not taken won't go in. -Wayne Gretzky

absolutly beautiful

Smedss BRONZE said...
on Mar. 18 2011 at 2:03 pm
Smedss BRONZE, Willenhall, Other
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Favorite Quote:
She lives the poetry she cannot write.

Beautiful!

on Mar. 17 2011 at 8:55 pm
TheHangingGirl BRONZE, Winter Haven, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"Poets utter great and wise things that they themselves can not comprehend."

Took my breath away. I wish i could write like that, so flowing and strong. I Absolutely love this poem. I have read it bout five times!!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Mar. 2 2011 at 1:48 pm
shandelarenve SILVER, Buffalo, Texas
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I'm astonished. Wow, this completely -word by word- explains a typical *I liked you, but you never wanted me* kinda relationship. Keep up the good work, and keeps your feelings writing. :) ♥Shandel.

AVERAGE BRONZE said...
on Feb. 7 2011 at 1:37 pm
AVERAGE BRONZE, Rosehill, Virginia
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wow im completly amazed . . . i <3 it

on Feb. 7 2011 at 11:44 am
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

i don't even know what to say! this is amazing :) it reminds me of being little when i dreamed about all these fairytales coming true in real life. i like the feeling you put into this piece. wow :) would you mind checking out some of my work? thanks and pleaseee keep writing!

on Feb. 7 2011 at 11:04 am
June_Survive SILVER, Kirbyville, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Limitations live only in our minds. But if we use our imaginations, our possibilities become limitless.” -Jamie Paolinetti

"In the end, everything will be okay. If everything is not okay, it's not the end."
Unknown

Absolutely loved it :D

on Jan. 20 2011 at 8:06 am
dancergurl22 BRONZE, Grand Junction, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Love, like you can't get hurt
Dance, like no one's watching
Live, like there's no tomorrow

this is great! :D


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