Make Believe This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

We were doomed from the beginning,
Blinded from the start,
But nothing can be done
To fool a happy heart.
With each smile and giggle,
Every embrace and every kiss,
We were shooting toward a happy ending,
And we missed.
Cinderella lost her slipper
And it was never found.
Prince Charming came too late,
Now no one’s sleeping sound.
Pillows are soaking wet,
Hopes are all lost.
No more dancing in the clouds.
Dreams have all been tossed.
The fairy-tale warmth has left us
As winter’s setting in.
The storybook reads the end,
But where should we begin?
Now your heart strives to be broken,
And you long for lonely nights
This time our ship is sinking
We’re going down without a fight.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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Free- said...
Mar. 25, 2011 at 4:50 pm


your rhyming was not annoying but worked beautifully with the flow and theme of your writing



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KelseyM.McNamara said...
Mar. 23, 2011 at 6:22 pm
really good! i liked how u compared it 2 cinderella! :)
l.iney said...
Mar. 19, 2011 at 3:17 pm
absolutly beautiful
Smedss said...
Mar. 18, 2011 at 2:03 pm
hanging_girl_666 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 17, 2011 at 8:55 pm
Took my breath away. I wish i could write like that, so flowing and strong. I Absolutely love this poem. I have read it bout five times!!!!!!!!!!!!!
shandelarenve said...
Mar. 2, 2011 at 1:48 pm
I'm astonished. Wow, this completely -word by word- explains a typical *I liked you, but you never wanted me* kinda relationship. Keep up the good work, and keeps your feelings writing. :) ♥Shandel.
AVERAGE said...
Feb. 7, 2011 at 1:37 pm
wow im completly amazed . . . i <3 it
dreamer_believer said...
Feb. 7, 2011 at 11:44 am
i don't even know what to say! this is amazing :) it reminds me of being little when i dreamed about all these fairytales coming true in real life. i like the feeling you put into this piece. wow :) would you mind checking out some of my work? thanks and pleaseee keep writing!
love_and_anatomy said...
Feb. 7, 2011 at 11:04 am
Absolutely loved it :D
gagalover22 said...
Jan. 20, 2011 at 8:06 am
this is great! :D
WerewolfWriting said...
Jan. 15, 2011 at 8:20 pm
My favorite part is: "Cinderella lost her slipper/And it was never found/Prince Charming came too late/Now no one's sleeping sound." It said more then the words that were put. Good work!
OriginalCarbonation said...
Jan. 1, 2011 at 6:56 pm
his almsot every day, its good to see its finally getting the recognition it deserves :)
alymarie3 said...
Dec. 29, 2010 at 7:35 pm
OneGodForever32 said...
Dec. 3, 2010 at 7:42 pm
I can honestly say this is one of my favorite pieces I've ever read. It's very well put together and extremely relatable. I hope you didn't write this from personal experiences, because I've been through it. But if so, keep your head up!
Lost.In.Life said...
Dec. 3, 2010 at 1:57 pm

This shows a lot of hard work and We all know we've been through the same and if not well, i guess now you do.x]

Love this definately one of my faves

ImaniIsTheName said...
Dec. 3, 2010 at 10:54 am
iReally Like This Poem It Makes Yuh think Alil Harder On The Realness Of Todays Current Events.. Ienjoyed This Alot!!<3
OriginalCarbonation said...
Dec. 1, 2010 at 10:27 pm
beautiful- stunning!!!
Hayley L. said...
Nov. 16, 2010 at 2:32 pm
you wrote this very well, staying on the topic is the hardest thing and you did it. its really good.:)
Annabelle294 said...
Nov. 11, 2010 at 8:42 pm
Really good, loved it!
Monkee63 said...
Nov. 11, 2010 at 3:24 pm
Wow! That was really great. It gave a great mental picture. Great Imagination! I loved it! :)
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