Make Believe This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

We were doomed from the beginning,
Blinded from the start,
But nothing can be done
To fool a happy heart.
With each smile and giggle,
Every embrace and every kiss,
We were shooting toward a happy ending,
And we missed.
Cinderella lost her slipper
And it was never found.
Prince Charming came too late,
Now no one’s sleeping sound.
Pillows are soaking wet,
Hopes are all lost.
No more dancing in the clouds.
Dreams have all been tossed.
The fairy-tale warmth has left us
As winter’s setting in.
The storybook reads the end,
But where should we begin?
Now your heart strives to be broken,
And you long for lonely nights
This time our ship is sinking
We’re going down without a fight.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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LifeIsButAPoem said...
May 6, 2011 at 10:12 pm
Apr. 25, 2011 at 8:48 pm
wow, this poem is honestly fabulous! I can see myself relating to it one day, when i go through a similar story!  I honestly think this poem is great!  keep up the good work
alwaysadreamer said...
Apr. 14, 2011 at 9:49 pm
truly gifted! =)
Debbie1 said...
Apr. 14, 2011 at 5:05 pm
Wow! this was really good! Well written, and kinda emotional. love it!
forgottenpenname This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 14, 2011 at 12:23 pm
Love it... I like how it starts out all happy cheery and all that and by the end it's like a splash of cold water in the face; reality. Fantastic job on this! :)
RFarage said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:25 pm
Great comparisons, great poem. (: !
kvater said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:14 pm
i really liked how they compared it to cinderella
Sierrah said...
Apr. 5, 2011 at 6:22 pm
amazing :D
Free- said...
Mar. 25, 2011 at 4:50 pm


your rhyming was not annoying but worked beautifully with the flow and theme of your writing



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KelseyM.McNamara said...
Mar. 23, 2011 at 6:22 pm
really good! i liked how u compared it 2 cinderella! :)
l.iney said...
Mar. 19, 2011 at 3:17 pm
absolutly beautiful
Smedss said...
Mar. 18, 2011 at 2:03 pm
hanging_girl_666 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 17, 2011 at 8:55 pm
Took my breath away. I wish i could write like that, so flowing and strong. I Absolutely love this poem. I have read it bout five times!!!!!!!!!!!!!
shandelarenve said...
Mar. 2, 2011 at 1:48 pm
I'm astonished. Wow, this completely -word by word- explains a typical *I liked you, but you never wanted me* kinda relationship. Keep up the good work, and keeps your feelings writing. :) ♥Shandel.
AVERAGE said...
Feb. 7, 2011 at 1:37 pm
wow im completly amazed . . . i <3 it
dreamer_believer said...
Feb. 7, 2011 at 11:44 am
i don't even know what to say! this is amazing :) it reminds me of being little when i dreamed about all these fairytales coming true in real life. i like the feeling you put into this piece. wow :) would you mind checking out some of my work? thanks and pleaseee keep writing!
love_and_anatomy said...
Feb. 7, 2011 at 11:04 am
Absolutely loved it :D
gagalover22 said...
Jan. 20, 2011 at 8:06 am
this is great! :D
WerewolfWriting said...
Jan. 15, 2011 at 8:20 pm
My favorite part is: "Cinderella lost her slipper/And it was never found/Prince Charming came too late/Now no one's sleeping sound." It said more then the words that were put. Good work!
OriginalCarbonation said...
Jan. 1, 2011 at 6:56 pm
his almsot every day, its good to see its finally getting the recognition it deserves :)
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