Make Believe This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

We were doomed from the beginning,
Blinded from the start,
But nothing can be done
To fool a happy heart.
With each smile and giggle,
Every embrace and every kiss,
We were shooting toward a happy ending,
And we missed.
Cinderella lost her slipper
And it was never found.
Prince Charming came too late,
Now no one’s sleeping sound.
Pillows are soaking wet,
Hopes are all lost.
No more dancing in the clouds.
Dreams have all been tossed.
The fairy-tale warmth has left us
As winter’s setting in.
The storybook reads the end,
But where should we begin?
Now your heart strives to be broken,
And you long for lonely nights
This time our ship is sinking
We’re going down without a fight.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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StarGazer9 said...
Jun. 22, 2013 at 6:58 pm
Beautifully written and i love the story :)
Allons-ypoet said...
Jun. 18, 2013 at 3:12 pm
The last two lines were stunning...a good twist to a commonly used phrase. Well done. 
Call_Me_Aria This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 14, 2013 at 11:56 am
captivating, I love it! especially the refrence to the Cinderella story!
JordanMelissa said...
Jun. 13, 2013 at 7:34 pm
This is rather incredible, I love it!
eagleeyeheather said...
May 14, 2013 at 12:45 am
very beautiful! heart touching
sarah98 said...
Apr. 30, 2013 at 3:05 pm
beautiful. i love everything about this
Bubbs This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 30, 2013 at 12:50 pm
On the verge of tears. Loving the the rhythm and the brief fairytale reference hinted at the unhappy ending. Perfecto!
Izzzzzzi101 said...
Dec. 8, 2012 at 2:21 pm
I like this. It flows and has a good rhythm to it. It doesn't seem stilted or broken. I think you did a good job and I love the references to the fairytales; it creates a sense of nostalgia for childhood. Well done!
nocommentisacomment said...
Nov. 27, 2012 at 12:58 pm
Could've used more fairy tale references, but still overall well written
remember16 said...
Oct. 15, 2012 at 6:54 am
amazing poem! 
skybean said...
Oct. 12, 2012 at 1:46 pm
I love it! Especially the fairy tale refrences.. :)
Sept. 23, 2012 at 7:18 pm
dreamwriter13 said...
Aug. 13, 2012 at 8:25 pm
Why would the heart strive to be broken? No one wants their heart to be broken
Diffuse replied...
Oct. 21, 2012 at 2:57 am
its not an intellectual thing actually, dreamwriter13... it is just a feeling...even then, its so vague... you just cannot hold on to the good things.... eventually all is broken.... i know about that feeling, i've written about it
Sarah1517 said...
Jun. 27, 2012 at 12:59 am
That's so sad... I wish they at least fought for what they wanted. Good story
remember16 replied...
Aug. 10, 2012 at 6:45 pm
This is good.
Aderes47 said...
Jun. 8, 2012 at 11:22 pm
This is very good and very sad. Are you on twitter by the way?
Krissy F. said...
May 14, 2012 at 12:38 pm
This poem was amazing! I loved the way you used assonance and consonance in your writing. The metaphors really made the writing interesting.
Indilove said...
May 14, 2012 at 8:19 am
I love this!!!! The flow, the wording, the style, the relativity, the amazing concept! You are a fantastic writer!!!!! 
SkylerTheBrave said...
May 14, 2012 at 1:16 am
This was really well written. I enjoyed reading this greatly. Keep up the good work. 
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