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We were doomed from the beginning,
Blinded from the start,
But nothing can be done
To fool a happy heart.
With each smile and giggle,
Every embrace and every kiss,
We were shooting toward a happy ending,
And we missed.
Cinderella lost her slipper
And it was never found.
Prince Charming came too late,
Now no one’s sleeping sound.
Pillows are soaking wet,
Hopes are all lost.
No more dancing in the clouds.
Dreams have all been tossed.
The fairy-tale warmth has left us
As winter’s setting in.
The storybook reads the end,
But where should we begin?
Now your heart strives to be broken,
And you long for lonely nights
This time our ship is sinking
We’re going down without a fight.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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BeccaAnne said...
Nov. 4, 2011 at 3:15 pm
Absolutely Amazing! Keep it up!
 
Lahari said...
Oct. 29, 2011 at 11:46 am

This is really good! Wow.

This is AMAZING! The rhyme fits perfectly and the words are precisely chosen. Can you check out some of my work? 

 
Dudet95 said...
Oct. 22, 2011 at 11:25 am
You are a very good writer.This has very good rhyme to it, and you used very discriptive words which I love!Its such a sad poem but it relates more to real life actions, because sadly life is not all about happy endings.I love how you encorperated Cinderella into this story and prince charming.:)amazing job 
 
Kelssssie said...
Oct. 19, 2011 at 9:37 am
This is reallly good, and i can relate alot to it..(:
 
JojoMimi said...
Oct. 8, 2011 at 7:06 pm
wow. very good
 
Wordscantsay said...
Sept. 15, 2011 at 11:40 pm
Love it , so sweet, sad and cute!!!! 10 out of 10!!!!
 
always_dance_in_the_rain said...
Sept. 15, 2011 at 9:22 am
Fantastic! You were really able to put a lot of emotion in it without it seeming too heavy. Great job! Keep writing
 
UnleashYourMind said...
Aug. 24, 2011 at 8:23 am
This is pretty amazing.. it's so creative and different but true all the same. I absolutly love it. 5 stars :)
 
HateKnuckle said...
Aug. 18, 2011 at 7:48 pm
Very descriptive way to say its over. Loved the whole idea. 5 stars.
 
Lonexwolf said...
Jul. 30, 2011 at 11:12 am
It shows lots of meaning, and lots of truthful meanings to this work of art. I love it a lot. <3
 
yousaypotato... said...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 10:34 am
i loved the mention of all the fairytale stories!!!!
 
whitstar27 said...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 8:35 pm
I like how it didn't have a happy ending, because in reality there often isn't a happy ending or the ending we wanted.
 
Cryswithaly said...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 8:05 pm
Breathtaking and AMAZING.
 
EyesofBlueFire said...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 7:12 pm

This truly took my heart for a ride. I was taken in at the very first line. Keep writing!

I could use a little feedback on my poetry, if you would check. :)

 
EllieMae said...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 7:02 pm
This is so lovely. I was hooked from the beginning. Your ryhtme and emotion portrayed is flawless. Very nice work.
 
thefamoustapper.... said...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 3:20 pm
I'm truly speechless...in a good way.
 
ElleNicole said...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 10:58 am

Love it.

I need more feedback, I was wondering if you would rate/comment on my work... thanks if you do and keep writing. This piece is a treasure.

 
savetheplanet said...
Jul. 6, 2011 at 12:12 pm
u combine rhyme with meaning which is what i love about this poem
 
ExpressWithinYouOut said...
Jun. 27, 2011 at 3:24 pm
love your poem .... very good
 
lifeloveyou1919 said...
Jun. 26, 2011 at 9:26 pm
you inspired me to write poetry thank you so much.
 
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