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We were doomed from the beginning,
Blinded from the start,
But nothing can be done
To fool a happy heart.
With each smile and giggle,
Every embrace and every kiss,
We were shooting toward a happy ending,
And we missed.
Cinderella lost her slipper
And it was never found.
Prince Charming came too late,
Now no one’s sleeping sound.
Pillows are soaking wet,
Hopes are all lost.
No more dancing in the clouds.
Dreams have all been tossed.
The fairy-tale warmth has left us
As winter’s setting in.
The storybook reads the end,
But where should we begin?
Now your heart strives to be broken,
And you long for lonely nights
This time our ship is sinking
We’re going down without a fight.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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DancingFingertips said...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 2:15 pm
I hate the break the chain of elated readers, but I just wanted to offer some constructive criticism. I thought you really broke the flow with this line: "We were shooting toward a happy ending, And we missed." Once I read that, I couldn't help but stop dead. It took me a second to get back into it; it might have worked better if the rhythm of the last line was the same as the one above it. But congrats, I really liked the allusion to Prince Charming and Cinderella as well. Cheerfully Depressing... (more »)
 
eliana924 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 18, 2011 at 9:36 pm
Great job! I like the way you reference fairy-tales to highlight your point.
 
ElleNicole said...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 9:42 pm
Hey, this is good. Mind checking out my work? Thanks.
 
aveawave said...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 3:10 pm
Way to go! :D
 
lemondrop16 said...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 1:54 pm
I absolutely love this.
 
SmartTart said...
Dec. 10, 2011 at 9:07 pm
I liked it! i can aqree. Made me feel that fantasy is as far as can be from reality
 
shreya756 said...
Nov. 20, 2011 at 8:32 am

I really love this.

Good job. Funy though, how this poem talks about the warmth that's non existant and while reading, I felt so grateful that it Prince Charming did come. It made me feel grateful for the wamth that still exists. It's amazing how sometimes we need fairytales to be able to piece together our reality. 

Really well done.

 
TheWhiteFlower said...
Nov. 14, 2011 at 3:16 pm
one word= W O W!!!!!
 
BeccaAnne said...
Nov. 4, 2011 at 3:15 pm
Absolutely Amazing! Keep it up!
 
Lahari said...
Oct. 29, 2011 at 11:46 am

This is really good! Wow.

This is AMAZING! The rhyme fits perfectly and the words are precisely chosen. Can you check out some of my work? 

 
Dudet95 said...
Oct. 22, 2011 at 11:25 am
You are a very good writer.This has very good rhyme to it, and you used very discriptive words which I love!Its such a sad poem but it relates more to real life actions, because sadly life is not all about happy endings.I love how you encorperated Cinderella into this story and prince charming.:)amazing job 
 
Kelssssie said...
Oct. 19, 2011 at 9:37 am
This is reallly good, and i can relate alot to it..(:
 
JojoMimi said...
Oct. 8, 2011 at 7:06 pm
wow. very good
 
Wordscantsay said...
Sept. 15, 2011 at 11:40 pm
Love it , so sweet, sad and cute!!!! 10 out of 10!!!!
 
always_dance_in_the_rain said...
Sept. 15, 2011 at 9:22 am
Fantastic! You were really able to put a lot of emotion in it without it seeming too heavy. Great job! Keep writing
 
UnleashYourMind said...
Aug. 24, 2011 at 8:23 am
This is pretty amazing.. it's so creative and different but true all the same. I absolutly love it. 5 stars :)
 
HateKnuckle said...
Aug. 18, 2011 at 7:48 pm
Very descriptive way to say its over. Loved the whole idea. 5 stars.
 
Lonexwolf said...
Jul. 30, 2011 at 11:12 am
It shows lots of meaning, and lots of truthful meanings to this work of art. I love it a lot. <3
 
yousaypotato... said...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 10:34 am
i loved the mention of all the fairytale stories!!!!
 
whitstar27 said...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 8:35 pm
I like how it didn't have a happy ending, because in reality there often isn't a happy ending or the ending we wanted.
 
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