Hidden Shadows

November 12, 2009
Girl of beauty, Girl of poise,
Girl with tear-filled eyes,

Hair of silver, Heart of gold,
A secret story, Not yet told,

Wrapped in silk, Draped with pearls,
All the lies, Begin to swirl,

Outside white, Pure and true,
Inside black, Guilty too,

Her skin smooth, her lips red,
Her soul torn, Her fate dead,

With a knife, In her hand,
Time rushing, Just like sand,

Her eyes close, Slow and Smooth,
As the knife, Peirced her through,

With a push, Of her hand,
The blade cut, Following command,

Not a shriek, Nor a cry,
Passed her lips, Just a sigh,

There was nothing, Not a pain,
Just the dark, A spreading stain,

Out came red, Bleeding freely,
Red was warm, Blades were steely,

Her body folded, Her limbs still,
Obeying herself, Her deathly will,

There she lay, Upon the floor,
A girl unmoving, A life no more,

From the North, A breeze came,
Bearing its burden, The dead its aim,

Caught her soul, Brought it down,
Over the earth, Upon its crown,

Left a dew, Covered each thing,
With a small, But precious cling,

Like the girl, The dew sparkled,
An outside light, Its rays angled,

If one looked, Just a little closer,
They would feel, The lie's blur,

For however lovely, Dew may be,
It hides a secret, Pays a few,

From its center, To the edge,
Dew is cold, A pained wedge,

Dew of beauty, Dew of poise,
Dew from tear-filled eyes.

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akbrgurl said...
Nov. 19, 2011 at 7:17 pm
simply gorgeous!
AngelForeverBleedingLove This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 16, 2011 at 7:38 pm
Rose, this is gorgeous work. Truly! Keep writing. PLEASE! :D -Angel
MelanieLouise This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 16, 2010 at 6:39 pm
i love the format. great work :) keep writing, Mel
BleedingRose replied...
Oct. 15, 2011 at 2:45 pm

thx a bunch!


Eniliuqcaj said...
Apr. 4, 2010 at 2:04 am
wow this was so awesome!!!!!!!! thanks for he comment and wow you write beautiful haikus and this is also a very beautiful poem, it is great you have great writing skills! keep it up!
BleedingRose replied...
Apr. 7, 2010 at 10:47 am

Thank you so much for your comment, that was so awesome to hear!  I'm glad you like this and my haikus.  :)  And your welcome.  ;)


Shabanana said...
Mar. 18, 2010 at 11:38 am
This is amazing and thanks so much for the comment and rating. I really appretiate that you liked my poem enough to give it a 5/5 thanks again -shana
BleedingRose replied...
Mar. 18, 2010 at 4:36 pm
You're welcome, you deserved it! And thanks so much for the comment!
Shabanana replied...
Mar. 18, 2010 at 5:28 pm
No problem and thanks so much! yours is also definitely 5 star worthy.
Codee said...
Mar. 17, 2010 at 4:12 pm
i 100% love this poem! it describes every single person in the world and the troubles & lies people go through. one of my favorites. :]
BleedingRose replied...
Mar. 17, 2010 at 7:40 pm
Oh my gosh thank you so much! I'm so happy you like it, that makes me smile! Glad to know it made it to your favorites. :) Thanks so much!
Shabanana replied...
Mar. 18, 2010 at 11:36 am
first off Rose this is amazing!!! and second codee if u loved this u shud check out my poem called Reflections. It also describes each person through the troubles of love friends and family. Every person can connect to it in their own way based on their life experiences. Please look at it and comment and rate. thanks shana
BleedingRose replied...
Mar. 18, 2010 at 4:39 pm
Thanks, to the both of you! C, I read Reflections, and it's def. 5 star worthy! Thank-you both again, getting new comments like this makes me really happy! :)
Milo! said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 3:38 pm
I really love this. I really like how everyone can relate to this. I hope you keep writing, because this is great. You should check out some of my stuff. I think you would like it.
BleedingRose replied...
Mar. 15, 2010 at 10:47 am
Thanks so much! I read some of your work, amazing! I love it! Very good job, keep writing and I'm so glad you liked this!
BleedingRose said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 10:47 am
Thank you so much for the comment, I'm really glad!
monster-chick-14 said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 10:02 am
this is great, i absolutely love it! :)
BleedingRose replied...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 10:48 am
Thank you so much for the comment, I'm really glad!
samcarter said...
Mar. 2, 2010 at 8:23 pm
this is beautiful in a dark way like a black rose i like it good job
BleedingRose replied...
Mar. 10, 2010 at 7:40 pm
Thank you so much for the comment! Mind looking at some of my other work? :)
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