Why Couldent It Just Be Me And You?

August 27, 2009
By RachyRach333 SILVER, Cedar Rapids, Iowa
RachyRach333 SILVER, Cedar Rapids, Iowa
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You Said that yo loved me,
but I dont know if it's true.
You say you still have feelings,
for some other girl.

I dont know if I should,
belive the words that you say.
Cause deep down inside,
im not feeling okay.

YOu say that youlove me,
you say that you care,
You said know matter what,
you would alwase be there.

I dont know if I should belive,
these words are true.
cause now im left feeling,
broken and confused.

Broken from the words,
that you say about the girl;
the one you can't seem to let go.

Confused about what to think.
Confused about what to do.
Confused about so manny things,
that are going on between me and you.

You say that you love me,
but I dont know if it's true.
You say you still have feelings,
for some other girl.

I dont know if I should belive,
the words that you say.
Cause deep down inside,
im not feeling okay.

I know I shouldent freak.
I know I should let this go.
But ever time I try
it feels like im hurting myself even more.

Now im hurt and,
I dont know know what to do.
Why couldent it just be me and you?

The author's comments:
I wrote this when I found out ex boyfriend was cheating one me with his ex girlfriend wile I was dateing him.

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on Dec. 23 2011 at 11:12 am
SmartTart SILVER, Beth;ehem, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Stand for what you believe in even if it means you stand alone.

Nice. i like it. I can relate to it too, it's easier when you write from experience . please comment on my work, Icould appreciate it

on Sep. 26 2011 at 9:18 am
maraquette.koss SILVER, New City, New York
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Its okay, but the spelling errors make it difficult to read.  It a good idea but the rhythm gets weird in some places, i would check that out.  but good job! 

on Jul. 30 2010 at 10:16 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)

I understand how you feel you deserve better. As for the poem it was really really good the only problem was grammar and you can fix that easily. Would you mind commenting on my work? I would appreciate the advice:)

Milo! said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 4:12 pm
What a great piece. It’s so understandable. You made it really easy to see where you’re coming from. I hope you keep writing, because this is really good. You should check out some of my stuff. I think you would like it.

on Sep. 22 2009 at 8:52 pm
RachyRach333 SILVER, Cedar Rapids, Iowa
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it's cool...It was my own fault in a way..but hey this poem is going to be in a book comeing out soon. So lol i'm kinda glad in a way that it happend to me.

<3 Rach

on Sep. 22 2009 at 8:51 pm
RachyRach333 SILVER, Cedar Rapids, Iowa
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lol thanks!

Yeah I know I will fined someone ells. lol all ready did. But I just took my anger out in the poem.

<3 Rach

on Sep. 13 2009 at 2:20 pm
MeganAnne PLATINUM, Niskayuna, New York
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Favorite Quote:
All my life I've looked at words as if I were seeing them for the first time. ~Ernest Hemingway

this is very beautiful and reminds me of my previous heartbreak.

Don't forget that you will find somebody else, somebody who will be truthful.

on Sep. 11 2009 at 7:41 am
B.T.Pixie BRONZE, Bumpass, Virginia
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I totally relate to that, and it's an amazeing poem, but you could use some better vocab. in certain areaes.

on Sep. 11 2009 at 6:48 am
wordweaver96 PLATINUM, Winchester, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
" It is not our abilities but our choices that show who we truly are. "
Albus Dumbledore


See, we really DON'T have anything to fear but fear itself!

i'm so sorry that happened but at least you can tell about it.

Brndi said...
on Sep. 10 2009 at 12:37 pm
i can totally relate to this poem.. one of my ex boyfriends cheated on me with their ex and i couldnt believe a word anyone told me that he cheated... b/c i thought he wouldnt lie to me and he told me he loved me but love does that its toll on lives sometime... dont stop writing this is a very very good poem!!! :]

erikae GOLD said...
on Sep. 8 2009 at 6:20 pm
erikae GOLD, Brookfield, Wisconsin
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This is really sad, and how its written, its completely relateable. I'm sorry he had to go and ruin a great thing by cheating

on Sep. 8 2009 at 12:27 pm
HeavenCooley GOLD, Stillwater, Oklahoma
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im sry things in life happen the way it does, im mean y does love have to take the wrong turn! good job!!!:)


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