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You Said that yo loved me,
but I dont know if it's true.
You say you still have feelings,
for some other girl.

I dont know if I should,
belive the words that you say.
Cause deep down inside,
im not feeling okay.

YOu say that youlove me,
you say that you care,
You said know matter what,
you would alwase be there.

I dont know if I should belive,
these words are true.
cause now im left feeling,
broken and confused.

Broken from the words,
that you say about the girl;
the one you can't seem to let go.

Confused about what to think.
Confused about what to do.
Confused about so manny things,
that are going on between me and you.

You say that you love me,
but I dont know if it's true.
You say you still have feelings,
for some other girl.

I dont know if I should belive,
the words that you say.
Cause deep down inside,
im not feeling okay.

I know I shouldent freak.
I know I should let this go.
But ever time I try
it feels like im hurting myself even more.

Now im hurt and,
I dont know know what to do.
Why couldent it just be me and you?



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SmartTartThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 23, 2011 at 11:12 am:
Nice. i like it. I can relate to it too, it's easier when you write from experience . please comment on my work, Icould appreciate it
 
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maraquette.koss said...
Sept. 26, 2011 at 9:18 am:
Its okay, but the spelling errors make it difficult to read.  It a good idea but the rhythm gets weird in some places, i would check that out.  but good job! 
 
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Supernova7 said...
Jul. 30, 2010 at 10:16 pm:
I understand how you feel you deserve better. As for the poem it was really really good the only problem was grammar and you can fix that easily. Would you mind commenting on my work? I would appreciate the advice:)
 
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Milo! said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 4:12 pm:
What a great piece. It’s so understandable. You made it really easy to see where you’re coming from. I hope you keep writing, because this is really good. You should check out some of my stuff. I think you would like it.
 
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Megan Anne S. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 13, 2009 at 2:20 pm:
this is very beautiful and reminds me of my previous heartbreak.
Don't forget that you will find somebody else, somebody who will be truthful.
 
Rachel L. replied...
Sept. 22, 2009 at 8:51 pm :
lol thanks!
Yeah I know I will fined someone ells. lol all ready did. But I just took my anger out in the poem.
<3 Rach
 
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B.T.Pixie said...
Sept. 11, 2009 at 7:41 am:
I totally relate to that, and it's an amazeing poem, but you could use some better vocab. in certain areaes.
 
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writer24/7/365 said...
Sept. 11, 2009 at 6:48 am:
i'm so sorry that happened but at least you can tell about it.
 
Rachel L. replied...
Sept. 22, 2009 at 8:52 pm :
it's cool...It was my own fault in a way..but hey this poem is going to be in a book comeing out soon. So lol i'm kinda glad in a way that it happend to me.
<3 Rach
 
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Brndi said...
Sept. 10, 2009 at 12:37 pm:
i can totally relate to this poem.. one of my ex boyfriends cheated on me with their ex and i couldnt believe a word anyone told me that he cheated... b/c i thought he wouldnt lie to me and he told me he loved me but love does that its toll on lives sometime... dont stop writing this is a very very good poem!!! :]
 
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Erika E. said...
Sept. 8, 2009 at 6:20 pm:
This is really sad, and how its written, its completely relateable. I'm sorry he had to go and ruin a great thing by cheating
 
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heaven said...
Sept. 8, 2009 at 12:27 pm:
im sry things in life happen the way it does, im mean y does love have to take the wrong turn! good job!!!:)
 
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