Need Love?

December 31, 2008
By carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 24 photos 51 comments

See it but never feel it.
Get close, only to push it away.
“Don’t know what you’ve got til it’s gone”
Epitome of my life.
What is wrong with me?
What makes me so un-lovable?
Can someone remove this defective sign from my forehead,
And replace it with a kiss.
I want more than mediocre.
I want someone to miss.
Do I ask for too much?
Are my requirements unachievable?
My heart remains unconquered, unattained.
I’m tired of fairy tale endings,
Silly thoughts put in my head by unrealistic, but hopelessly believable movies.
They are all the same.
Girl meets boy. Girl messes it up. Boy forgives girl.
Happily Ever After.
At least they let on that relationships have problems.
I want raw, unrelenting love.
The real deal.
No movie, novel, or episode of “Sex and the City” could ever touch.
Left alone, drowning in thoughts,
Who else in the world could need love,
Like I need love?



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on Apr. 4 2009 at 6:51 pm
Grania PLATINUM, Portland, Maine
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This is beautiful.

on Apr. 2 2009 at 11:12 pm
StarlightResurrection SILVER, Lemon Grove, California
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wow. that was great...! i really relate. :)

on Apr. 2 2009 at 12:52 am
t0b3th30nly1 BRONZE, Ringoes, New Jersey
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i really liked how you worded everything it was AWESOME a very deep poem that everyone can relate to

on Apr. 2 2009 at 12:12 am
MorningStar15 DIAMOND, Orange, Vermont
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this poem was beautiful i know how it feels i was in that state for years,,, i love poems i can see myself in,,, and this is the one... thank you for posting it i loved it! keep writing i think i'd be cool to read more of your work!

~Peace,Love,and Happiness~

on Mar. 29 2009 at 2:10 am
xXTearsxOfxLunaXx BRONZE, Longmont, Colorado
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Story. Of. My. Life.

on Mar. 28 2009 at 11:50 pm
I loved this poem, it totally expressed exactly how I feel inside, thanx for it, definately keep writin'!!!!!!

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on Mar. 25 2009 at 10:49 pm
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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i really like the idea and the meaning - i thought that it was moving - but i feel like it's a little obvious. personally, i would put more concrete imagery, but i like the ideas and the meaning, and i think it's good. however, it seems to me to be more of an essay or paragraph than a poem. but then again, being me, i like to have my poems have a rhythm, so my style's different than yours. if you want to take a look, the link is: TeenInk.com/raw/Poetry/article/91407/A-Lonely-Rain/. thanks! keep it up!

on Mar. 25 2009 at 9:35 am
cobainthedoors SILVER, Port Saint Lucie, Florida
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That was truly wonderful.

Anony Mous said...
on Mar. 25 2009 at 2:19 am
Not that good for the front page...kinda unoriginal

on Mar. 25 2009 at 12:28 am
RhyanWoods SILVER, Glendale, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
there's always two people in every picture: The photographer and the viewer.

This is great work. It expresses exactly how I feel. Everytime I let myself like a guy I seem to screw everything up.I feel like its my fault.

on Mar. 24 2009 at 12:37 am
OhMyGod123Peter BRONZE, Mastic, New York
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i feel the same way. but in a different sense. im a guy. and its like i mess up every relationship i've ever had. in my eyes it's like nothing about me is right. so many people tell me otherwise. and yet the girl i have my heart set on is completely out of reach.

on Mar. 23 2009 at 3:07 pm
YeseniaG SILVER, Livonia, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Life is what happens when you're busy making plans.

Great work. Great word usage.

on Mar. 21 2009 at 6:19 pm
psycholinzmeier GOLD, Kaukauna, Wisconsin
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amazing poem i know exactly how u feel

love is out there we just have to wait

on Mar. 21 2009 at 6:02 pm
wordpainter19 BRONZE, Madison, Wisconsin
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Very good-I can totally relate.

on Mar. 20 2009 at 6:34 pm
It like the poem, it was awsome and real

on Mar. 20 2009 at 6:34 pm
This poem is kinda of good

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on Mar. 20 2009 at 2:52 pm
megan39 BRONZE, Bohemia, New York
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very nice, i loved the way you spoke and made it feel like a poem from an undercover barish, but in a good way. i can relate. beautiful. KEEP WRITING! (:

on Mar. 20 2009 at 9:59 am
writingsavedmylife SILVER, Livonia, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"We've got this gift of love, but love is like a precious plant. You can't just accept it and leave it in a cupboard or just think it's going to get on by itself. You've got to keep watering it. You've got to really look after it and nurture it." - John Lennon

"In my end is my beginning."... - T.S. Eliot

omg, it's like you're reading my mind exactly. this is amazing and i feel the same way too

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on Mar. 20 2009 at 2:18 am
IRBFGW DIAMOND, Cincinnati, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Hey, assbutt!" Supernatural, Castiel.

I can 100% relate, and i thought it was amazing

on Mar. 20 2009 at 12:22 am
splatterpunk PLATINUM, Phoenix, Arizona
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hay i know how you feel. that is an awsome poem and likes the figurative language in it. Keep writing like that and you will be excellent


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