A Cliche

December 30, 2008
By ayaman PLATINUM, Tenafly, New Jersey
ayaman PLATINUM, Tenafly, New Jersey
37 articles 12 photos 4 comments

I know, it’s considered
A cliché type of thing
To make a rose
A symbol for love

But I always thought
That’s just it
A beautiful thing
So powerful
So minute
One concept
Captured
In one object

It has many layers
Roots
A foundation
Depth
Purity
Beauty
Simple
Yet
Convoluted

It has thorns
Of course
There are negatives
All you want
Is to capture
To hold
That one small
Object
So delicate

You take it
In your hands
And then you see
You feel
For the first time
And the second
And the third
Always
It will hurt you
You will bleed

And maybe
Maybe you’ll learn
Maybe you’ll hold it
Carefully
Next time

But always
Every time
You’ll feel the thorns
You’ll see the beauty
You’ll have it in your hands
But it will hurt you

However
If you care enough
If you want it
Enough
You won’t mind
The thorns


The author's comments:
I know it's a cliche, but sometimes they're just so accurate...

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TheCandyVan said...
on Oct. 23 2013 at 9:30 am
TheCandyVan, Salem, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"Move forward
and repeat after me with your heart:

“I no longer need you to fuck me as hard as I hated myself.”

Make love to me
like you know I am better
than the worst thing I ever did."
- Buddy Wakefield

I am so in love with this oh my gosh. 

on May. 18 2013 at 10:04 am
beccalynn1663 GOLD, West Milford, New Jersey
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I really liked this a lot. You are so talented!

on May. 12 2012 at 7:04 pm
Fromtheheartfortwo GOLD, Carson, California
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Favorite Quote:
"when you trip over love it is easy to get up, but when you fall in love it is impossible to stand again" albert einstein

This poem is beautiful.... It's full of truth... I like this writer used a rose as their metaphor for the whole poem...

BlueJay said...
on Jan. 23 2012 at 10:08 am
i like this poem. because its true. it makes sence how it all fits together and how it works to represent somthing so hurtfull and harsh and at the same time represents the same thing that beautiful and amazing.

on Nov. 15 2011 at 7:42 pm
Darien328 SILVER, Ovid, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Courage is the resistance of fear, the mastery of fear, not the absence of fear" -Mark Twain

I think this is beautiful. It reminds me of what my friend Dylan always says. "If you draw a rose for a girl, your life will change"  I am a girl, So I haven't done that. but I've heard him say it a lot. :P

on Oct. 5 2011 at 10:30 am
chrissie_star GOLD, Commerce, California
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Favorite Quote:
Its just another chapter in the past just turn the page dont close the book.

well done!! could you do me a favor and check out my work? any of them will suffice k thanks! :)

on Aug. 22 2011 at 12:05 pm
ngaynor111 BRONZE, Stratham, New Hampshire
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This is so beautiful! Its such a simple cliche that you turned into such a real and intricate idea. well done!! :)

on Jun. 17 2011 at 3:50 pm
Jesse914 BRONZE, Portsmouth, Rhode Island
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I really like this...it takes talent to turn a cliche into something new and true and beautiful:-)

on May. 26 2011 at 4:20 pm
RhythmAndRhyme BRONZE, Rockford, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"There's no half-singing in the shower, you're either a rock star or an opera diva." ~~Josh Groban

This is so beautiful. I've never thought about love in this way....I think this may influence my outlook on life. So pretty! :D

kdoll411 said...
on Feb. 1 2011 at 2:56 pm
OMG i love this its so true, the rose (now that i look at it like that) does kinda reflect relationships. i love this keep up the good work annnnddd submit more i would love to read them 

on Jan. 15 2011 at 12:10 pm
StaceFaceK BRONZE, Wilmington, Delaware
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Favorite Quote:
The dream of yesterday is the hope of today and the reality of tomorrow.

This is really beautiful... your poem actually made me think of a rose as a little less cliche.

on Jan. 7 2011 at 7:14 am
_MissLaurel_ BRONZE, Moosic, Pennsylvania
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The symbolism is undeniably true, and the wording makes it magical. This was truly deligtful to read!

~Miss Laurel


on Nov. 9 2010 at 7:46 pm
WinterFairy PLATINUM, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't dream it. Be it."
"Singing is praying twice, and dancing is singing with the body."
"Paper is more patient than man."
"Where you live shouldn't determine whether you live"

really gr8!!

on Sep. 26 2010 at 8:20 pm
LoveLikeEpic GOLD, Boise, Idaho
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Favorite Quote:
"You got enemies? Good, that means you actually stood up for something in you life"-Eminem
How can i go forward if i dont know which way im facing?-John Lennon

i wanted to congratulate you on how amazing this poem is. I love it to death (Ha, how cliche?) Way to go for using sybolism and taking it to an extreme.

A+F

~ Holly


on Aug. 20 2010 at 12:01 pm
OneProzacADay PLATINUM, State College, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"You are the universe expressing itself as human for a little while." -Eckhart Tolle

this is so true. i like the way you think.  

on Aug. 13 2010 at 9:59 pm
Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"when you cry, do you waste your tears?" Madonna

this reminds me of the song "and so it goes" by Billy Joel... this poem captures the feeling of how precious love can be... read some of mine?

kms777 GOLD said...
on Jun. 8 2010 at 6:14 pm
kms777 GOLD, Winn, Michigan
16 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"learn from your mistakes but regret not a thing"

wow thats so true. except you put so much more detail into it. and made it much more deep and intriguing. i hope you'll read some of mine and teahc me how to put such great detail into something so small such as a rose

on Mar. 12 2010 at 10:03 pm
AshlynSerora BRONZE, Riverview, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Always found in ink wells and paper hearts..

I really enjoyed your poem! I can really relate. It's sad and ironic, but it really is a beautiful truth. I really like that you use short and straight forward images. I think it really locks in the meaning. But yeah, the pic should've been a rose haha :) Although a black and white picture is perfect. The absense of color just reflects on the meaning of the poem. I'd love to be able to capture that sort of deepness in my work. My first poem here isn't fairing well haha the second is on its way though and I'd love to have your advice, comments, opinions on both of them if you're interested!!

on Mar. 2 2010 at 8:16 am
i couldnt find a rose :(

on Mar. 2 2010 at 8:07 am
I Know the pic. looks kinda wrong


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