Chaos Theory This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This work has won the Teen Ink contest in its category.

November 14, 2008
Carolyn says she believes in angels
while mascara spiders creep thickly along the
heavy baggage beneath her eyes like the
black pitch of the school hallways at night or
the charcoal that she dips her fingernails in and I
remember cheating on my math test that morning
I tell her I believe in people.

Roasted honey nut, the color she was born with but
you really wouldn’t know it because of the midnight L’Oréal
she chooses, tragically highlighted with Punk Pink or
Raging Red from a bottle and 15
minutes of waiting –
It spills limply over her black eyes whenever she leans down to write and
Carolyn says she believes in fate.

In planets aligning in the universe and
Feng shui that keeps mice away and prevents ulcers but also
makes a girl fall in love with a boy but
I know all about chemistry and hormones and catalysts so I
think I believe in science.

In reincarnation, she thinks she’ll come back as a bird
Or maybe a peacock and I say I agree when I
see those striped stockings that come to her knees and
neon earrings lifeless at her shoulders but she only laughs …
tells me I never really see her and to
call her later.

Now with the dial tone in my ear
the cold trembling and I’m suffocating on nothing
because I really see her and I
know she believes in the afterlife but
she doesn’t believe in laughter and
the phone just rings and rings and rings …

Carolyn said she believed in angels.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

This work has won the Teen Ink contest in its category. This piece won the January 2009 Teen Ink Poetry Contest.

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HollerGirl26 said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 7:13 pm
Wow..this was amazing..beautifully breath-taking. FANTASTIC job at hinting here and there..then finally tying it up with a pale blue bow..sad but stunning! <3333 you have some serious skill
livelovesmile said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 5:53 pm

This poem is so awestriking, and beautifully sad. 

Would you mind checking out my poetry "Captured By Reflections"  
"Girl Next Door" and "Longing For Those Days"? I would love to get feedback from the writer of such a beautifu lpoem or anyone else on this site. I'm new to Teen Ink and would really appreciate feedback. Thanks.

soldout said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 4:29 pm
So tragic, I can't even use an exclamation mark- it would be too abnormal. Honestly, at first I just stared at the words. I couldn't piece it together. But now I understand, and like Carolyn says she believes in angels, I believe that there IS some writing superstars on teenink. This is pure amazing. Five stars, overflowing.
Mossmoon said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 3:29 pm

I really liked reading this poem, and it's sad how Carolyn doesn't believe in smiles. Somehow, that reminds me of someone I know...

Good Job!

TheAmazingJoysie replied...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 3:34 pm
hey im not quite sure but did carolyn die or am i just missing it great poem tho
darksunshine said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 2:08 pm
WeAllBurn said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 12:24 pm

This is breathtaking. <3. amazing. 5/5.


please read my work and tell me what you think. this is so amazing. (:

forgottenpenname This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 10:41 am
I can't tell you how many times I've read this poem, but I just absolutely love it. :) This is so amazing!!
Hejlna said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 10:03 am
this is absolutely incredible. i love this poem!!!!
Free- replied...
Oct. 22, 2011 at 7:23 pm
finally some actual good writing published in the mag! I'm not one to give out 5's and starred reviews, but for you I will! BRAVO!
ElleBell223421 said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 9:23 am
I dont get it. Could somebody explain it to me!
LittleMissSunshine08_11 said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 8:46 am
Wow... I LOVED this poem. I liked how you made it lighter (not completely light, but not too heavy either) at the beginning, sounding like the slightly exasperated best friend, then at the end you twisted it around and hit us with something deep and moving. Keep up the amazing work!
someonecomments02 said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 8:19 am
This was truly beautiful with the vivid descriptions and all the emotions that seemed to be poured into this poem. I especially love how you used the phrase "suffocating on nothing" and when you used "the phone just rings and rings and rings". At that point, I just knew something was going to happen. Great use of imagery! Really enjoyed reading it. It was like an unfolding story for me.
webweaver96 said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 6:34 am
This is sort of hauting, but what increases it, for me, personally, is the photo. The girls look exactly like two people I know very well. I moved, and we've never visited.
Anonymous_7 said...
Aug. 29, 2011 at 4:22 pm
love this! Great idea!
Sabrina B. said...
Aug. 9, 2011 at 7:49 pm
This has become my future inspiration for anything I'll ever write. I've always considered writing poetry but I've never had something to pull me in the direction of motivation in writing it. This has. This is so beautiful and motivating for me. Thanks, you'll forever be my idol.
Lola_Black said...
Aug. 9, 2011 at 3:53 pm
This is amazing! The cogs started turning in my head at the last stanza, and when I read the last line my heart stopped. This is so brilliantly sad, I love it! Keep writing!
purplequeen said...
Aug. 9, 2011 at 9:08 am


comment on mine now and i will comment on yours.!!!!!!!

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flawless200 said...
Aug. 4, 2011 at 10:38 am
Laura_Oliver said...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 6:35 pm

This was very interesting. There seemed to be a lot of double meanings in this.

If you like this, check out my poem, "True Colors", and leave some feedback!

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