Chaos Theory This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This work has won the Teen Ink contest in its category.

November 14, 2008
Carolyn says she believes in angels
while mascara spiders creep thickly along the
heavy baggage beneath her eyes like the
black pitch of the school hallways at night or
the charcoal that she dips her fingernails in and I
remember cheating on my math test that morning
I tell her I believe in people.

Roasted honey nut, the color she was born with but
you really wouldn’t know it because of the midnight L’Oréal
she chooses, tragically highlighted with Punk Pink or
Raging Red from a bottle and 15
minutes of waiting –
It spills limply over her black eyes whenever she leans down to write and
Carolyn says she believes in fate.

In planets aligning in the universe and
Feng shui that keeps mice away and prevents ulcers but also
makes a girl fall in love with a boy but
I know all about chemistry and hormones and catalysts so I
think I believe in science.

In reincarnation, she thinks she’ll come back as a bird
Or maybe a peacock and I say I agree when I
see those striped stockings that come to her knees and
neon earrings lifeless at her shoulders but she only laughs …
tells me I never really see her and to
call her later.

Now with the dial tone in my ear
the cold trembling and I’m suffocating on nothing
because I really see her and I
know she believes in the afterlife but
she doesn’t believe in laughter and
the phone just rings and rings and rings …

Carolyn said she believed in angels.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

This work has won the Teen Ink contest in its category. This piece won the January 2009 Teen Ink Poetry Contest.

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Jess H. said...
Feb. 27, 2009 at 5:27 am
FallenPoet89 said...
Feb. 24, 2009 at 2:32 am
Very good and different,good imagination and talent. Deb u done good!!
aivilo said...
Feb. 24, 2009 at 2:04 am
wow. awesome!!
Maria K. said...
Feb. 23, 2009 at 10:36 pm
Lovely poem! Brilliant! Keep writing!!!! U rock, Debbie!
Mollie B. said...
Feb. 23, 2009 at 8:25 pm
wow, this is great. the only things i would change were the grammatical errors (there were a few) but besides that, it's amazing. i really liked the imagery and the ending... it gave me chills
Fangz said...
Feb. 23, 2009 at 5:27 pm
interesting. not spectacular, but its definately one of the best ones i've read here.
Nataliee_x said...
Feb. 23, 2009 at 1:33 pm
This Is Like A FariyTale Because, She Say's That She Belives In Angless and She Explains What She Say's In Good And Detail To Say What She's Saying . :)
einbrick said...
Feb. 19, 2009 at 3:44 am
uhm... i guess im a snob. I wasnt too thrilled by this. there are a couple grammatical and stylistic changes you could have made to make this 100 times more powerful. and its an overdone subject that seems to be being written about like its going out of style, whatever it is you just wrote up there
InfinityRose replied...
Oct. 2, 2009 at 6:47 pm
I think that is kind of rude to say, because this poem is about an incredibly sensitive, personal topic. I think this poem is beautiful, and so what if she could make a few grammatical changes - the emotion and the imagery were both amazing.
Lostinbooks This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Oct. 18, 2009 at 10:40 pm
YES! Who cares about grammar in poetry? It's a beautifully worded poem...and feels a lot truer than a lot of the other things I've read on here...
krzykrys replied...
Dec. 23, 2009 at 6:44 pm
yea its great and if you went through that and wrote aout it im sure you would make a few gammar mistakes too. said...
Feb. 17, 2009 at 4:26 pm
That Was Amazing!!!!!
jessica marie said...
Feb. 8, 2009 at 4:24 pm
you are one of the most amazing writers i have found on her. keep it up. one day you might have your own book. thats my dream,
kaycee_anne said...
Feb. 6, 2009 at 1:47 pm
Great concept. i didnt really get a sence of flow though. Keep working.
ShamrockWriter said...
Feb. 5, 2009 at 10:06 pm
Awesome piece. Really makes you think about your beliefs. It's intense and flows really well. Overall, fantastic job. Keep Writing!
SticksAndStones said...
Feb. 5, 2009 at 3:30 pm
Wow--amazing, amazing poem. Your creative usage of tenses really sneak in the essence of the story--sadness, death, unsaid farewells. Write on, Debbie!
tweedle dee said...
Feb. 5, 2009 at 1:39 pm
very nice
PixieGirl9325 said...
Feb. 3, 2009 at 11:35 pm
I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Words can't describe
wolf333 said...
Jan. 31, 2009 at 7:37 pm
Wow that was amazing! I beleive in angels to but i also beleive that God will protect me through everything. Try talking 2 him.
Mariiee.<3♥ said...
Feb. 5, 2009 at 3:53 pm
I Realy Love your poetry i do some poems too. .:) thats realy awesome it made me think alot .. well keep up the good work. .i love it
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