The Real Me

November 1, 2008
By Brianna! BRONZE, Indianapolis, Indiana
Brianna! BRONZE, Indianapolis, Indiana
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The real me
Is someone I don't let many see

Everyone thinks they know me so well
Because they don't know about the secrets I refuse to tell

They think my life is perfect all because of the stupid smile I force myself to wear
I guess they don't know about all those times I lived a total nightmare

I am not saying my life is that horrible
But let me tell you, neither is it very cheerful
Everyone seems to think my life is some walk in the park
I guess I could imagine my life like that but the park would be completely dark

No one seems to understand my family problems
Or why I really write these poems
But I can't expect anyone to understand
Because I don't even understand

My life is not as great nor simple as it appears
If it was I wouldn't be crying all these stupid, little tears
But what will you do to help me?
Yea, exactly,
Nothing


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on May. 5 2009 at 12:31 am
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

OMG!!!! AMAZING!! You are definitely going to be a published author. I love your poems. They are so rhythmic and so full of emotion, not to mention so true. I like the ending! Keep writing, you'll get published! Can you check out my poems? Just click on my name.

G.H.o-st said...
on Nov. 13 2008 at 10:14 pm
It's me again :) yeah i also liked this poem, although i do have to comment that it needs a little bit of more..drama i suppose. Hm..what I'm trying to say is that this is a really great topic,because we all have the side that we wish to keep to ourselves. Although you are really good at writing down your emotions i think you should add more sensory details, have you ever heard of " show but dont tell?" try to substitute things..for ex. instead of saying red apple you could say substitute "red" with words like blood colored, warm,crimson ..you know..depending on what tone you want your poem to be <3 but this is a great !!!! cant wait to see more of your work :)

on Nov. 10 2008 at 9:05 pm
Absolutely Breathtaking I love it its sooooo deep i can feel the words playing in my head i can basically feel the poem love it ~ =) Chase keep up the good work!!!

IAmNotAlive said...
on Nov. 10 2008 at 8:35 pm
Hey, you asked me to read some of your poems in your comment on my poem "I Am Not Alive". Thanks for the feedback. I really liked this poem. It's saying no one really knows some one... Oh also I am going to check out your other poems and could you please check out my other one: TeenInk.com/raw/Poetry/article/61590/Pains-Existance/

annexgeyz said...
on Nov. 10 2008 at 1:47 pm
wow, i love your poem. its amazing and i can totally relate to it.

on Nov. 8 2008 at 3:10 am
This poem is deep! I really like the way you expressed youself because im exactly the same way


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