When The Wind Blew Us Away

September 28, 2008
Though our paths crossed,
we may walk past each other.
Almost like two strangers on a road,
we had the opportunity to know each other.

But we're all busy,
chasing after our sweetest dreams and desires.

Maybe if we all slowed down and looked at the things around us;
the brisk Autumn air,
the azure-painted sky,
and the people who love us.

But like that dove,
you flew away from me.
And like that blinding light,
you mocked me.

The air subtly blew us away from each other,
making you walk faster.
Faster, faster.
Never looking back...

I couldn't grasp your shadow.
Your steps; swift and silent,
as if you wanted to leave immediately.

You left me standing there.
When our paths crossed,
we could never stay with each other for long.

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nannerbanananerz :3 said...
Nov. 13, 2008 at 11:07 pm
:D you blow me away !!! :D
jim x said...
Oct. 9, 2008 at 12:04 am
i think this was really good and the wording is absolutely beautiful. it should be known more than it is right now. GOOD JOB
.::Raine::. said...
Oct. 6, 2008 at 11:07 pm
Really cool. Yes, your stanzas are well done, and the ending was really pretty, as well as the fourth stanza thinger.
Lulz1243 said...
Oct. 6, 2008 at 11:00 pm
tis very creative and detailed!
randomperson said...
Oct. 5, 2008 at 12:11 am
ooh. i like it. <3
Elizabethuang413 said...
Oct. 5, 2008 at 12:09 am
its goooood :]] It has a sad feeling to it
Tanyax3 said...
Oct. 5, 2008 at 12:09 am
Hey Carolyn! Uhm, idk you but my friend does! She told me to read your pieces... and to tell you the truth, I'm a very VERY picky reader when it comes to poetry... But I must say, I really do love your poem! It's beautifully written in every way... and the guy who you wrote it for, is very lucky to have someone like you loving them ;) 5 stars! Wonderfully done dear
Maggiex3 said...
Oct. 5, 2008 at 12:03 am
I must admit, this is one of the most beautifully written original poems that I've come about in the poetry language... It's touching and sweet ;) Beautiful job <3
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