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Burning Truths

August 21, 2008
By KelseyCasper GOLD, Bridgeton, New Jersey
KelseyCasper GOLD, Bridgeton, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
" Never regret something you've done, because at that moment it was exactly what you wanted"


You’re a liar
A cheater
A wanna be player
You turn heads
Break hearts
But in your mind nothing haunts
No guilty conscience
No hearts desire
Nothing but lust
Sets your soul on fire


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EdytD SILVER said...
on Sep. 2 2009 at 8:19 pm
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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I think you've got a great idea here, but it needs more imagery - show that people lust after him, rather than tell the reader. Describe the look in the girls' (or guys', if your main character is a girl) eyes as they stare in desire. Give images that the reader can actually picture, so that they can almost see the poem play out in their mind.

I think if you play with this, it could be a really fantastic poem. Good job!