September 20, 2012
Alone and crying,
heartbroken and upset,
You're not the only one with this feeling.
So, forget.

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Ruby-Paige-Rose said...
Sept. 21, 2012 at 8:57 pm
If it were just a little bit longer it might have been better. Allthough you did get the point across.
bagley777 replied...
Sept. 21, 2012 at 9:10 pm
  I definitely like longer poems too. I was going for a cinquain type of form, (5 lines, 2 syllables, 4, 6, 8, 2) which is why it's so short. But I didn't do it properly anyway (that dang "so" at the end put me at 1 syllables too many, but it just sounded better with it!) Thanks for the feedback!(:
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