The cottage

December 1, 2011
By artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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the place where I go desperately and anxiously
The place where I walk oddly and shoeless
Because my toes feel uncomfortable
when they feel the cold floor

The place where I violently and abruptly release my insanity, my craziness,my twisted unknown artistry

Where my hair raises up
because of the goosebumps
Because of my frosty,twisted and dark imagination

It's the place where I wake up at 2 am to write what the sleepy morning whispers me

This place is mine
This place is my precious
It's my well preserved iron trunk

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on Dec. 14 2011 at 1:21 pm
WhiteWings GOLD, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
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One word. Great

 


on Dec. 12 2011 at 11:08 am
ZohaBahir BRONZE, Karachi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Even blood of blood seem to strike no resemblance until the hands and heart are locked up in stiff chains of adversity.

Good Work! verry impressive :)

on Dec. 12 2011 at 11:07 am
Wonderment DIAMOND, Scranton, Pennsylvania
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I love this! Its so descriptive and amazing. I can't even really form a real opinion other than I love it. :)

on Dec. 11 2011 at 5:58 am
youngspeare BRONZE, Nairobi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
We wouldn't ask a rose that grew from the concrete for having damaged petals; in turn we'd all celebrate its tenacity, we'd all love tz will to reach the sun well we are the roses n these are my damaged petals don't ask me why thank God and ask me how

Good job! The line "my twisted artistry" was simply epic. Keep posting :) 
Please check out my poem "Ghosts of the Past" and rate/comment? Would really appreciate it!

on Dec. 10 2011 at 8:40 pm
dbk1098 PLATINUM, Rockville, Maryland
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Really good!!!!!! Love the imagery and description!

on Dec. 8 2011 at 9:14 pm
Nathaniel PLATINUM, Huntsville, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"For there is nothing either good or bad, but thinking makes it so." --William Shakespeare

Dark. Humorous. I like it. 

on Dec. 5 2011 at 9:00 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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tnx u very much, i ll work on the thing u told me. tnx again

on Dec. 5 2011 at 8:55 pm
Resonating_Words SILVER, Dallas, Texas
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Very nice (: As posted below, I like the sort of mystery to it. "My twisted unknown artistry" is probably my favorite line. 

However at "This place is my precious" I got a sudden vision of Gollum from Lord of the Rings XD So that sort of interupted my enjoyment of the poem temporarily. But only slightly -- intentional or not I enjoyed the reference XD

In all, well done. However, I did feel a slight lacking. It moves slowly at the beginning, entire stanzas given to description and then an abruptness. Sometimes abruptness works, but for me it didn't in this case.

So -- it's good and has potential to be even better


on Dec. 4 2011 at 8:35 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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tnx, means a lot to me, sure i ll take ur advice

on Dec. 4 2011 at 8:35 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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tnx, means a lot to me

on Dec. 4 2011 at 8:10 pm
DifferentTeen PLATINUM, Seaford, Delaware
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Favorite Quote:
"There’s no such thing as true love, just spurts of insanity—falling over and over again, thinking that won’t happen to me"

I love how mysterious this poem is, its kind of dark and secretive. I really liked it. The only thing you could work on in future poems is the flow and adding some poetic devices. Other than that though its awesome. Keep writing!

on Dec. 4 2011 at 3:28 pm
Lovestinks1395 GOLD, Plainfield, Illinois
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God save us everyone we will burn inside thefire of a thousand suns.

This is pretty good, I look forward to seeing you grow as a writer in more of your work!


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