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March 27, 2011
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I wrote your name on paper someone erased it.

I engraved your name on a tree someone cut the tree.

I traced your name in the sand the waves washed it

I engraved your name in my heart...
it stayed

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Diemer said...
May 7, 2011 at 10:32 pm
Great Capu!  In addition to loving the idea, feelings and clarity, Keiko says she can totally imagine you actually doing these things in real life.  Please let us know when you post your next one, we'll look forward to reading it!
GrandmasKiteDotCom said...
May 5, 2011 at 10:06 am
What a good approach! In the end that's what we're left with, isn't it?
Rajat said...
May 4, 2011 at 11:34 pm
Like it ! keep up the thoughts !
hilary said...
May 4, 2011 at 11:23 pm
and now your poem is staying in my heart. i know by the smile on my face and the soft, melty feeling in my heart.
pamoja said...
May 3, 2011 at 11:14 pm
Fresh, concise, poetic, a beam of light, bravo
thaichris said...
May 3, 2011 at 10:34 am
very nice Capu i like big kiss
Judy said...
May 3, 2011 at 9:21 am
I loved it. You show real potential as a writer and I look forward to reading more of your work! Judy (Doug Ptacek's mother)
Bobby said...
May 3, 2011 at 5:38 am
I really like this poem.  It is short and sweet and sticks with you.  I am looking forward to reading more!
blabla said...
Apr. 28, 2011 at 5:41 am

i liked it but i think it sould be a little longer


yunwang replied...
May 3, 2011 at 9:29 am
So sweet .Let me translate it in chinese. 我在纸上写下你的名字 他却被擦掉了。 我在树上刻下你的名字 树却被砍掉。 我在沙滩上画出你的名字 海浪把他带走。 我在心里刻下你的名字 他 留下
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