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Adieu to Summer

December 24, 2010
By PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND, Parker, Colorado
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND, Parker, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"If you don't leap you'lll never know what it's like to fly"


The wind is blowing cooler than before
The sun is beginning to fade today
And hearts of children playing melt away

The Seasons switch from left to right quickly
And saddening days come when snow blows down
A terrible sight to see white blankets
As they do cover the whole troubled town

They snuff and sneer as shovels come to work
They pile snow onto the lawns and scowl
The cars get stuck and people shovel out

The snow came late so children are in school
No playing here; they have to stay and learn
A scream is not in sight; laughter has gone
No marks are left from sleds or boots in town

Alls quiet till’ the time of day has come
The bell will ring and children laugh and run
The fun is finally here for today


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on Dec. 30 2010 at 4:28 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
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Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

i like it. it tells the story of summer ending and its a very peaceful poem. i like the way it rhymes and how every second verse is 3 lines and the ones in the middle of them are four lines. I love the first verse but i think you could probably work on the very last line instead of ''The fun is finally here for today'' perhaps you could change it to something like '' Their fun is finally over for this day'' etc. Great poem though!!

on Dec. 30 2010 at 3:30 pm
Gettysburg63 PLATINUM, Waukesha, Wisconsin
23 articles 1 photo 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you are going to win any battle, you have to do one thing. You have to make the mind run the body. Never let the body tell the mind what to do... the body is never tired if the mind is not tired." -General George S. Patton

I like the poem, but it doesn't flow as smoothly as i'd like it to. The last sentence I would change to "It is time for their fun". And I'd change the third sentence to, "And hearts of children at play melt away". Other than that I think you have a good poem. Good work!


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