I Tore The Walls (You Said Goodbye)

The ripped wallpaper reveals black holes,
So like my soul, my heart that you stole,
And I hang in the silence of agony,
And I hang in the agony of cold

I gave you a key on a necklace of glass,
I want it to mask, but the demon does pass,
And I cower in shadow of my fury,
And I cower in fury of your last

My hands itch to hold you on last time,
To cross the line, to call you mine,
And I die in the burning of the sun,
And I die while the sun still shines





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Ayyad said...
Jan. 24, 2012 at 9:51 pm
I love this poem!! Also I love tge rhyme pattern!! If u like please checkout my first and only poem!
 
TRAPBOYZ5 said...
Oct. 3, 2011 at 9:52 am
MAN THYSE POEM IZ STRAIGHT IT AINT ALL THT THO I KAN DO BETTA SO KEEP IT GUDDY AN RITE A BETTA ONE SHAWTY
 
mrittmritt77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 20, 2011 at 8:22 pm

i like it :) and the rhyming pattern's unique too. nice work

 

 
ilovepasta said...
Feb. 25, 2011 at 9:48 am
The line "my hands itch to hold you one last time" is very relatable. This poem is written very powerfully and put a lot of thought into it. 
 
Farmer said...
Feb. 25, 2011 at 9:43 am
This is a good poem.  You can really see what the writer is talking about.  Good job!
 
jamiejean12 said...
Feb. 25, 2011 at 9:42 am
I really liked this poem. It is very relatable and i like the detail put into it.
 
Treckintime said...
Nov. 29, 2010 at 8:03 pm
This is really good. But can you like maybe explain what "And I cower in the fury of your last." means? It would make a lot more sense if i knew. Oh and can you please check my work and see if you like it and comment and rate?
 
Luminescence said...
Sept. 24, 2010 at 8:18 pm
Wow, this is very good! You obviously put a lot of emotion into it.
 
Collado92 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 20, 2010 at 1:30 pm

this is really good, I really like this.

Please check out some of work and let me know what you think.

 
writer62 said...
Jul. 20, 2010 at 9:44 am
great! this is good!
 
tammy said...
Nov. 20, 2009 at 11:47 pm
i love this poem. it discribes a lot of things in live that all i have to say
 
Mirror_Of_You replied...
Apr. 1, 2010 at 2:17 am
I definitely agree - I love this poem! I love how you repeat the main ideas, and then extend then. Elaborate them. I think it has great potential to be the best actually.
 
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