Ships and Birds

May 20, 2010
All this talk of mocking birds,
Where are all the doves?
When revision becomes complacent
And words are not enough.

I can not fathom the fathoms
Of the anchor that keeps me sane;
But ever so slowly, its been pulling
Up on the disintegrating chain.

My voice is hoarse from yelling
Out for Noah's dove.
My heart is hoarse from yelling
Out for the undeniable love.

The love for which these ships
Bask in an unfailing sun;
Yet mine is going nowhere,
And still it is almost done.

The rutter is underperforming,
The mask is broken in half.
Much like my hopes of returning
To where I was resident last.

Pictures in frames that are broken,
Cracked from the bitter waves,
Prove that at the time of my sinking,
I was already perusing the graves.

To my own death I offered friendship,
We can only say the refusal was net.
Tossed overboard, the water seemed starved,
And eyes closed, body shaking wet,

My dove I had long awaited
Flew overhead, and if it could talk,
It would say, "I tried to war you,"
Because in the end, all birds mock.

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Mimi8 said...
Aug. 17, 2010 at 4:38 pm
This is amazing, I love it!
Supernova7 said...
Aug. 13, 2010 at 7:19 pm
I loved this! You have talent guess youre my competition;)
riley... replied...
Aug. 13, 2010 at 8:04 pm
haha thank you :)... wish the ti people felt the same way! lol
AvengedJasonFold said...
Aug. 11, 2010 at 3:02 pm

simon cowell feedback--you asked for it!


just kidding. Really it was incredible--I mean I think I liked it so much because it reminds me so much of my style of writing poetry and I think I could really relate to the meaning of it.

That said I only understood half of it, which I think is a sign of it being a great literary masterpiece because it seems that every poem that has a few lines or stanzas that stump people become something that critics and... (more »)

riley... replied...
Aug. 12, 2010 at 4:48 pm
haha why thank you mr cowell
AvengedJasonFold replied...
Aug. 12, 2010 at 9:02 pm
your welcome but give credit where credit's due! My name's Jason lol
riley... replied...
Aug. 12, 2010 at 9:09 pm
ok thank you jason cowell. haha
AvengedJasonFold replied...
Aug. 12, 2010 at 9:15 pm
lmao smart alec my last name isn't cowell lol
riley... replied...
Aug. 12, 2010 at 9:27 pm
lol well nice to meet you jason. im riley.
AvengedJasonFold replied...
Aug. 12, 2010 at 9:51 pm
nice to meet you too riley lol
wild-free said...
Aug. 11, 2010 at 1:12 pm
This was amazing! So beautifully written and full of emotion. The last verse was my favorite, very powerful and honest. The poem, metaphor, writing-skill, all of it is so wonderful. Truly great job!
squidzinkpen said...
Aug. 10, 2010 at 1:42 pm
You've written the type of poem that I absolutely adore. I like them longer, rhyming, and so full of emotion that I almost cry. It was brilliant, well worded, and emotional. Your metaphores were wonderful and word play was superb. Excellent, top notch, wonderful.
riley... replied...
Aug. 10, 2010 at 1:58 pm
thank you veryy much :)
iMonica said...
Jul. 30, 2010 at 5:35 pm

What a beautiful poem. :)

Clearly your best; I am looking forward to your future pieces.

ellyn-bo-bellyn_2014 said...
Jul. 7, 2010 at 12:01 pm
wow. This is SO great! one of the best. Ever. I can't believe no onehas commented on it yet... odd. I mean it's just so true and right and- gah, words aren't enough. IF only you could type REAL facial expressions. It's AH-MAZING!!!!!
riley... replied...
Jul. 7, 2010 at 2:48 pm
thank you much :D
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