Gone (mixture of hiakus and tankas)

we walked and we talked
About the things on our hearts
You held my hand tight
You moved in way to fast
You have lost my attention

But then i went back
to you. what is wrong w. me?!
should have known better!

we walked and talked
aboutt things on our hearts
you held my hand tight
promising not to let go
i fell for that stupid lie

the truth stared at me
then you told me what i feared,
"i have a girlfriend"

i felt very numb.
it all happened to quickly
you were gone.again





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GangstaEyes This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 15, 2010 at 1:54 pm
I really like this and can relate! The flow is really good but I've never heard of a tanka. Can you explain what it is please? - your poem has me wanting to know more about it. Anyway, Great job!
 
bound4life4ever This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 23, 2010 at 8:07 pm

tanka is just like a haiku but a haiku is 5,7,5 for the syllables in the lines

a tanka is 5,7,5,7,7 for the syllables

 
GangstaEyes This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 23, 2010 at 8:22 pm
Oh. Thats really cool! Thanks for replying!
 
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