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Don't Give Up

January 28, 2010
By Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
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Peering through the crystal glass
Viewing her only hope to let herself free
Knowing that deep down within
To her freedom would never be.

"Give up, give up,"
She heard herself say
But she pushes that thought away
At the dawn of each day.
"What's the point? What's the point?"
She said her mind falling apart
Giving in to doubt and
Takes those problems straight to heart.

A ray of sunshine starts to shine through
Making her feel brightness inside
But once that light fades
Her soul has once again died.

"Give up, give up,"
She heard herself say
But she pushes that thought away
At the dawn of each day.
"What's the point? What's the point?"
She said her mind falling apart
Giving in to doubt and
Takes those problems straight to heart.

When she gets terminally ill
Now she forced to see
How happy her life had been
And set her heart free.

"Give up, give up,"
She heard herself say
But she pushes that thought away
At the dawn of each day.
"What's the point? What's the point?"
She said her mind falling apart
Giving in to doubt and
Takes those problems straight to heart.

Now she sees the present brightly
And is thankful for each day
Praying each moment
On earth she'd still stay.

Her family and friends
Cried when she died
But frozen on her face
Was the happiness in her eyes.

The hardened heart
Had broken at just the right moment
This was always God's plan
And to heaven she was joyfully sent.


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Payton SILVER said...
on Jul. 2 2010 at 8:43 am
Payton SILVER, Howells, Nebraska
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Be yourself because that's whats really cool.

Wow this is really good you really captured how she felt and how she never gave up even though she wanted to.  You are an amazing writter keep it up.

on Jun. 27 2010 at 7:39 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1985 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

aw that was amazingly beautiul. like, i see it, she pushed herself into happiness and she kept it the rest of her life. this was awesome, good job!!

on May. 2 2010 at 12:27 am
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse PLATINUM, Kula, Hawaii
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Favorite Quote:
"Everything you dream is real and everything real is a dream"

 I LOVE YOUR WRITING!!!!!!!!

on Apr. 24 2010 at 7:41 pm
--LoveHappens--, Fairfield, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"A friend is someone who knows you, but loves you anyway"

I love the writing... how you repeated the one stanza but I don't understand the topic and what is happening and how the girl died but other than that it is great. I would love it if you checked out my writing as well especially the Pretty One and leave a comment thanks so much and great work!!!

on Mar. 15 2010 at 3:20 pm
xodistantdreamerxo BRONZE, South Jersey, New Jersey
3 articles 1 photo 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over. Smile because it happened." -Dr. Seuss

This is redonkulously (my own word) relatable. I know that I've gone through that type of mindset before. You captured this beautifully.

DumDum BRONZE said...
on Mar. 5 2010 at 1:51 pm
DumDum BRONZE, New York, New York
2 articles 0 photos 42 comments

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Flying is learning how to throw yourself at the ground and miss --Douglas Adams
You call it sarcasm, I call it wit.--Anonymous

More beautiful than a strawberry sunset :)

A little vague, but most poems are.

I was going to tell you forgot a comma, but I forgot where. I think in the 2nd stanza?

on Feb. 27 2010 at 8:42 am
Lost-In-Life GOLD, Whitby, Other
11 articles 0 photos 299 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's never to late, if it weren't for the last minute many things would never get done!

A very beautiful poem. The message is really relatable. The only thing was I didn't get the first stanza. Amazing writing, though!

on Feb. 23 2010 at 9:37 pm
PaperPlanes BRONZE, Henderson, Nevada
3 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything has beauty, but not everyone can see it." -Confuscious

Beautiful... I'm really drawn towards this poem, because I feel I can relate so much-- pretty exact, actually. Great job. :)

on Feb. 20 2010 at 7:49 pm
thescientistyellow GOLD, Nauvoo, Alabama
11 articles 2 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If everybody is thinking alike, then somebody isn't thinking." - George S. Patton

"But frozen on her face, was happiness in her eyes" I love that..Overall a very impressive poem.

phebbs BRONZE said...
on Feb. 14 2010 at 8:05 pm
phebbs BRONZE, Naples, Florida
3 articles 1 photo 5 comments

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"color my life with the chaos of trouble"

are these song lyrics? the tone of the poem is really smooth. i love it, you're very talented(:

on Feb. 14 2010 at 8:04 pm
...PensiveGurl... PLATINUM, Aurora, Colorado
20 articles 0 photos 268 comments

Favorite Quote:
You get ideas from daydreaming. You get ideas from being bored. You get ideas all the time. The only difference between writers and other people is we notice when we're doing it- Neil Gaiman.
Who are you to be who you are?-Le'Na Pernell

wow. beautiful. you're really talented. o.0

on Feb. 14 2010 at 7:42 pm
Nikiblue PLATINUM, Bloomfield Hills, Michigan
20 articles 0 photos 137 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stupid Is As Stupid Does." -Forest Gump (;
"No one who achieves success does so without the help of others. The wise and confident acknowledge this help with gratitude."

That was a really pretty piece. It reminds me of those people with cancer. They tell themselves to give up, but they never do until the cancer takes over. Keep up the good work! (:


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