Game Winning Ball

January 12, 2010
By dani7 BRONZE, Park City, Utah
dani7 BRONZE, Park City, Utah
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Racing down the field
with only seconds left
Opponents are trying to catch up to me
determined to get the ball out of my stick

All around me spectators are clapping
cheering me on which make me want to
score so badly

It feels like I’m flying, maybe I’m just running so fast
Slowly, my body Shrinks into a spherical shape
I am carried by a netting around me,
swaying back and forth

I’m jerked forward, out of my netting shelter
Flying towards a goal with a padded goalie and stick
I start screaming
Narrowly I pass the oversized lacrosse stick and
crash into the net

I’m overwhelmed because everyone is cheering
and they pick me up
I am held in the air as everyone screams
I am the Game-Winning Ball

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mr.fingers said...
on Jun. 25 2010 at 5:55 pm
mr.fingers, Mount Hood/ Parkdale, Oregon
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It was goodish. I think you should've clarified the sport at the begining or not at all. Also, rather than making yourself the ball, just be one of the players. I love your style of writing though. You just have to get the whole theme and topic step down.


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