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Our Lady Hope

Of all fragile things to recollect,
Remembered rebirth of heart
And all of hope, in her eternal aspect.
Recall the notions from the start,
The genesis of strife and loss,
For in her realms she played her part.
Reality fell for the strike of her toss
And uncertainty became her joy,
Fitful in the grace of heavenly gloss,
Forever, alas, her earthly toy.
Deep in untouchable recess,
Her actions calm and coy,
Though her call upon the heart redressed.
Cared for, for her unbound innocence.
Tragic hearts denied her, for histories confess.




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Jess95 said...
Jun. 15, 2010 at 8:40 pm:
This is amazing. So deep! It flows really well and it's unique. I loved it...P.S. sorry it took me so long to comment...and thanks for what you said about my poem My Best Friend...some times I find my self thinking "Was it worth it, what I did, was it worth losing my best friend" but it's words such as the ones you wrote that reassure me...So thank you.
 
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Amy13 said...
Jan. 27, 2010 at 11:19 pm:
I think it's pretty good! It has an obvious passion that I can rarely produce in my poetry. On the criticism side: try to write some poetry that doesn't rhyme on every line. I personally believe that rhyming should be used as an accent, not a foundation. Otherwise good :)
 
CallineShayRosreon replied...
Jan. 28, 2010 at 10:09 am :
Thanks! :) This is actually one of the few where I do use rhyme as a foundation. Most of the time I don't bother trying to fit my work into a scheme.
 
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